Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The map illustrates the developmental changes had done road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. looking from an overall perspectives it is apparent that car park for staff and public was same and constructed two roundabout for traffic moreover, the bus station constructed in southwest of city hospital.

firstly, the ring road was around the city hospital building while the there was car park on southeast side of city hospital for staff and public. from the city road the hospital road was built.

secondly, there were so many development changes occurs such there two roundabout constructed in front of city hospital building and other was build at the junction of city road and hospital road to avoid traffic congestion. In addition to this bus station was build in southwest of hospital building. staff car park was on the same place while public car park was placed at east side of hospital building.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of roundabouts and the new bus station. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention the car parks, the comparison is slightly inaccurate; for instance, you state the staff car park remained in the same place, but the map shows the public car park moved to the east. The overview is also quite brief. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two car parks and provide a more cohesive summary of the major changes rather than just listing them.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical (e.g., 'firstly', 'secondly', 'in addition to this'). The flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed, particularly in the opening paragraph where the sentence structure is fragmented. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes accurately. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic verbs like 'built' and 'constructed' repeatedly. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'developmental changes had done road access' and 'looking from an overall perspectives'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary related to urban planning and spatial description, such as 'extended', 'relocated', 'transformed', or 'situated'. Additionally, ensure that your word forms are correct to avoid distracting the reader from your main points.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with article usage ('in southwest of city hospital'), subject-verb agreement ('there two roundabout constructed'), and tense consistency ('bus station was build'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex constructions. While the meaning is generally understandable, these persistent errors impede the flow and accuracy of the report. Focusing on basic sentence construction, correct verb forms (e.g., 'built' instead of 'build'), and proper preposition usage will help improve your score in this area.

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