Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The supplied map illustrate the information about city hospital road changes in the two years which in 2007 and 2010.

In overview, it is clearly seen that in the hospital road was straight forward but after the development road have two roundabout for controlling traffic. furthermore, hospital create bus station and different staff car parking for employees, while they have similar parking for all.

At the first glance, It was clearly shown that in 2007 the hospital road had small pillars around left and right side but in 2010 hospital authority create two roundabout for controlling traffic congestion. Also develop a bus station in left side for patients and opposite side they create parking only for staff while similar park area for staff and public they had in 2007. Shifting towards remaining data, in 2007 hospital had only a one entry but after development it had two entry was open for one staff and other one was public and also create public parking behind the public enterance.

Shifting towards remaining data, in 2007 hospital had only a one entry but after development it had two ent

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of roundabouts, the bus station, and the changes to parking and entrances. However, the report is incomplete as it ends abruptly mid-sentence. While the key information is identified, the lack of a proper conclusion and the repetitive nature of the final paragraph hinder the overall development. The comparison between 2007 and 2010 is present, but the description of the layout is sometimes confusing, particularly regarding the 'pillars' and the specific locations of the new entrances. To reach a higher band, ensure all parts of the prompt are fully addressed and the response is completed logically.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is disrupted by the incomplete ending and the repetition of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In overview' and 'Shifting towards remaining data', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes described. The abrupt termination of the text significantly impacts the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision. Phrases like 'straight forward' and 'small pillars' do not accurately describe the map features. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'hospital authority create' instead of 'the hospital authority created'. The range is limited, and the repetition of words like 'create' and 'development' suggests a restricted vocabulary. More precise terminology related to map description, such as 'constructed', 'converted', or 'relocated', would improve the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('map illustrate', 'hospital create') and tense inconsistencies ('in 2007 the hospital road had... but in 2010 hospital authority create'). The sentence structures are relatively simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing articles and incorrect capitalization. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the spatial relationships being described.

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