Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The map demonstrates about the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Overall, the facilities for car parking had upgraded in 2010. A new car park area for the public was introducing in the East side of the hospital and a gate was builded connected to ring road for the car park area. Subsequently, there was one more bus station is added in 2010 which is less far than 2007.
In 2010, the Public car park area was seprated from the Car park: staff and public in 2007 and added beside the ring road in the East direction. The bus stop which was far away from the hospital in 2007 had now replace and one more bus station were added at the roundabout in the south direction of the City Hospital.
The bus transport had been improved near the city hospital in 2010 compared to the facilities in 2007. Due to the new roundabout, small amount of land of City Hospital were demolished in the south side of the city hospital in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, including the changes to car parking and bus access. You successfully identified the addition of the new car park and the modifications to the bus station locations. However, the description of the changes is occasionally imprecise, such as the claim that the hospital land was 'demolished' due to the roundabout, which misinterprets the visual data. While the main trends are identified, the overview could be more clearly integrated to highlight the most significant changes, such as the shift from a single car park to separate staff and public facilities. Overall, the response addresses the task requirements adequately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. The progression of ideas is generally clear, moving from the car park changes to the bus transport modifications. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the use of 'Subsequently' and 'Due to'. Additionally, some referencing is slightly confusing, particularly when comparing the 2007 and 2010 layouts. While the paragraphing is sufficient, the flow between sentences could be improved to create a more natural, cohesive narrative.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'demolished', 'roundabout', and 'facilities'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'less far than' (instead of 'closer than') and 'demonstrates about' (which is grammatically incorrect). The repetition of 'car park area' and 'bus station' suggests a limited range of synonyms. To improve, focus on using more precise descriptive language and ensuring that collocations are natural. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'was introducing' (passive voice error), 'was builded' (incorrect verb form), and 'one more bus station were added' (subject-verb agreement error). While the meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors in tense and agreement prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on mastering passive voice constructions and ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement throughout your descriptions.
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