Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The two maps illustrates road access to a city hospital from 2007 to 2010.

Overall, in 2010 city hospial compare to 2007 had a wide range of facilities scuh as Bus station, Public car park etc. In addition 2007 not have these faciliries.

In the begining, 2007 city hospital near the ring road city hospital near the hospital road should the trees both side of the road and on the right side of the hospital road have a car park staff and public as well besides this had a bus stop.

In contrast, 2010 city hospital developed well such as near the ring road at the righr side build a public car park to easy entenrace to the hospital as well a walkable distance for the car park and beside the hospital road near to the bus station, while a walkable distance to the city road at right side of the hospital, moreover to vist the hospital have a easy access through the transport.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to summarise the main features of the maps, noting the changes between 2007 and 200, such as the addition of the bus station, public car park, and changes to road layouts. However, the response falls short of fully presenting a comprehensive overview. Some information is imprecise or confused, such as the description of the trees and hospital road layout, and comparisons between the two years are underdeveloped. The overall summary lacks clarity in highlighting the key spatial transformations. Therefore, the task is addressed only partially, aligning with the Band 5 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, which gives it a basic organisational structure. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression and logical flow. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as starting paragraphs with 'In the begining' and 'In contrast' where they do not function appropriately to connect the ideas. Reference words are sometimes ambiguous, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the various map features. These issues place the response firmly in Band 5.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical errors that impede smooth reading. Examples include spelling and word choice errors like 'illustrates' combined with a plural subject ('maps illustrates'), 'hospial', 'scuh', 'faciliries', 'entnrace', and 'vist'. While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to transport and infrastructure ('bus station', 'public car park', 'ring road'), the range is limited and minimally adequate. The numerous inaccuracies in spelling and word formation prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex structures that result in severe grammatical errors, run-on sentences, and faulty syntax. For example, clauses are strung together without proper subordination or punctuation, such as 'In addition 2007 not have these faciliries' and 'moreover to vist the hospital have a easy access through the transport.' Subject-verb agreement is frequently violated, and verb tenses are misused. Because errors are very frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, the grammar performance meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

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