Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the below describe the distinc between hospital in 2007 in addition 2010
Fistly we could see the change in bus parking back in 2007 bus station was in east side a bit far away from clinc moreover in 2010 its west side near hospital ,secondly car parking has been shifted from hospital road to to right side towards ring road , thirdly we can see three round about one is connected towards rind road moreover to city road further more staff prking has been shifted towards right side and the paringk space moreover hosptal space have been incresed
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, containing only 98 words. This significantly impacts task achievement as the summary is incomplete and under-developed. While the student attempts to highlight some main features, such as the relocation of the bus station and car parking, the overview is extremely limited and lacks the necessary depth and comparison required for an Academic Task 1 response. Key features are mentioned disjointedly without sufficient support or complete coverage, resulting in a Band 4.5 performance for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks standard paragraphing, written instead as a single, continuous block of text with run-on sentences. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and misused, relying heavily on conversational connectors like 'Fistly', 'moreover', and 'further more'. There is no clear overall progression or logical sequencing of information, making the text difficult to follow. Referencing is frequently unclear, contributing to a Band 4.0 score for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'distinc' for distinction, 'clinc' for clinic, 'rind' for ring, and 'paringk' for parking. The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for discussing map data. Attempts to use less common items fail due to poor word choice and severe spelling inaccuracies that occasionally strain the reader's understanding, aligning with a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of run-on clauses linked improperly by commas rather than proper punctuation or conjunctions. There are major structural errors, missing subjects, incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'in east side' instead of 'on the east side'), and a complete lack of punctuation control. Errors are very frequent and constantly impede communication, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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