Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The two maps illustrate some changes of a road access and parking facilities to a city hospital from 2007 to 2010.
Overall,city hospital has showed the dramatic changes in road access and parking facilities which have been made in the favour of individuals in the given time frame.However,in previous years the bus stop was so far away and peoples have to suffer at walking distance while, which has improved in time period.
In 2007, individuals have faced several problems which came through bus because the bus stop was far away from city hospital which has been developed in 2010 near the Infront of hospital and overcame the difficulties of passengers.
In 2010, another change also has been recorded that the public parking and stop parking was
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the prompt by describing changes between the 2007 and 2010 maps, but it falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 126 words. Furthermore, the content fails to provide a comprehensive overview of the main features shown in the diagrams, missing major developments such as the new public car park, the reconfiguration of the staff car park, and the addition of roundabouts. The description is vague, overly narrative, and incomplete, trailing off mid-sentence at the end. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response attempts to use basic cohesive devices such as 'Overall' and 'In 2007', but the logical progression is weak. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is incomplete and unformatted. There are issues with referencing and sentence boundaries, making it difficult to follow the flow of information. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly, and the abrupt ending disrupts the overall structure of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student uses basic vocabulary such as 'changes', 'road access', and 'parking facilities'. There are awkward collocations and inappropriate word choices, such as 'peoples have to suffer at walking distance' and 'stop parking'. Spelling and word formation are generally basic, and the incomplete final sentence demonstrates a lack of lexical control over the required descriptive language for Academic Task 1.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response shows a very limited range of sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'city hospital has showed the dramatic changes' (incorrect article and tense usage), 'peoples have to suffer', and 'which came through bus'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Overall,city hospital'). Complex structures are rarely attempted and, when used, are inaccurate and impede communication.
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