Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The below two map illustrate road approach to a city hostpital in year between 2007 and 2010.
In this map city hospital since 2007 which show few things the ring road aound city hospital cover from all direction centrally. The road goes down to south which is hospital road and the road both parallel opposite site bus stop where car park area for staff and public while then the road turn to connected city road to the south-east side.
City hospital 2010 the ring road cover as usually hospital centrally but east side of hospital just near ring road connected to public car park. there is two roundabout of hospital road both connected to bus station with the west side of hospital road also the staff car park can seen the side of hospital road but below roundabout connected main road city road which goes to west to east.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarise the main changes between the two maps, noting the ring road, the hospital road, the relocation of the car parks, and the addition of roundabouts and a bus station. However, the analysis is superficial and contains several inaccuracies in describing spatial relationships. Furthermore, the response is 149 words long, falling just short of the 150-word minimum requirement, which incurs a penalty. Overall, the task is addressed only partially due to the under-developed reporting of features and the length violation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is very basic and disjointed. The response is divided into three brief paragraphs, but the logical progression between sentences is severely hindered by poor phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as 'the ring road cover as usually hospital centrally', making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak and mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive, with basic terms like 'road', 'hospital', 'car park', and 'bus stop'. There are numerous word-choice and spelling errors, such as 'map illustrate' instead of 'maps illustrate', 'hostpital', 'aound', and 'opposite site'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with very poor control and accuracy, meaning the lexical range is only minimally adequate for the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly constructed simple sentences. There is a complete lack of accurate complex structures. Frequent errors in verb tenses, prepositions, and sentence construction—such as 'In this map city hospital since 2007 which show few things' and 'there is two roundabout of hospital road'—impede comprehension and cause significant difficulty for the reader.
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