Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The two maps display how road access to a hospital changes from 2007 to 2010.
Overall, there are considerable changes made in road, managing spcae available in better way.
Main alterations are done on bus stops, car parks, structure of hospital road.
In 2007 the ring road surrounding the hospital was connected with the hospital raod. In 2010 two roundabouts were added at the junction of the hospital road and the city road, respectively.
There was a car park for both staff and public onthe southeast side of Ring road in 2007. However, by 2010, it had become staff car park only and new parking lot was built for public on east
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to summarise the main features of the maps, noting the addition of roundabouts, changes to the car parks, and the bus station. However, the response is severely underdeveloped and incomplete, ending abruptly in the middle of a sentence ('on east'). Furthermore, the word count is only 112 words, falling well short of the 150-word minimum requirement. This incurs a significant negative impact on the Task Achievement score, as key details are omitted and the task is not fully completed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response makes an attempt at paragraphing with an introduction and brief overview, but the body paragraphs are extremely fragmented and incomplete. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic ('In 2007', 'In 2010', 'However'). The lack of a completed text and abrupt ending severely disrupt the logical progression and overall coherence of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive ('changes', 'road', 'car park'). There are several noticeable spelling and typographical errors throughout the text, such as 'spcae' instead of space, 'raod' instead of road, 'onthe' instead of on the, and missing words at the end of sentences. The lexical range is limited and barely adequate to convey the intended meaning of geographical and structural changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are noticeable grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing, such as 'how road access to a hospital changes' (should be past tense) and 'managing spcae available in better way' (missing articles and preposition issues). Punctuation and sentence boundary errors are also present, notably with the incomplete final sentence.
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