Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in previous photos demonstrate city of hospital in different time in 2009 the hospital city there is bus stop but outside and far away from it and there is ring road

further more the stuff and public next to hospital rd in the same place but in the 2010 the hospital city have public car park besided and there is two roundabout in city road in the left bus station is near from city in the right staff right park i contemplate the second the hospital city in 2010 which convenient there is more places and it's more tidy from to the first hospital city in 2007 in the second the individuals feel comfortable they found where park their car

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the minimum word limit of 150 words, containing only 120 words. This impacts the overall development of the task. While the student attempts to describe some changes between 2007 and 2010—such as the addition of roundabouts, a bus station, and a separate public car park—the reporting lacks clarity and precision. The overview is absent, and the description of features is disjointed and incomplete. For instance, phrases like 'in previous photos demonstrate city of hospital' fail to accurately summarize the visual data provided. As a result, the response only partially addresses the requirements of Task 1.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing, presented as a single continuous block of text, which severely hampers the readability and logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a disjointed flow. For example, transitional phrases like 'further more' and 'in the second the individuals feel comfortable' do not connect clauses logically. Referencing is also unclear throughout the response, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships and chronological changes between the two maps.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently inaccurate. The student uses phrases like 'hospital city' instead of 'city hospital' and misspells common words such as 'stuff' instead of 'staff' and 'besided' instead of 'besides'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items, and word choices often impede communication, as seen in expressions like 'the right staff right park i contemplate'. The limited range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the visual data effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text consists largely of run-on sentences joined improperly by conjunctions or commas, lacking correct punctuation and basic sentence boundaries (e.g., 'in 2009 the hospital city there is bus stop but outside and far away from it and there is ring road'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and frequent errors in basic verb tenses, prepositions, and agreement make comprehension difficult for the reader.

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