Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the tow layouts blow show network toa a place hospital in 2007 and 2010
this image the both city hospital and one of the first layout is old layouts is hostpital there is mention one ring road bus stop and car park staff and public on city road,
while new layout city hospital thre is a left side one bus station and right side staff acr park and then there is a roundabout some distance away, and changes second layout ,first layout bus stop and second layout bos sation there is big change in hospital,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, standing at only 95 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely restricted. While the student attempts to highlight some changes between 2007 and 2010—such as the replacement of individual bus stops with a bus station, the addition of roundabouts, and the reorganisation of car parks—the information is presented in a fragmented and underdeveloped manner. There is no clear overall overview of the main trends. Due to the under-length nature of the response and limited coverage, it falls into Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is written as two extremely long, run-on sentences without proper punctuation, capitalization, or paragraph breaks. This lack of structural control makes the text very difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying on repetitive conjunctions like 'and' to string clauses together. There is no logical progression of ideas, resulting in a confusing layout. Paragraphing is absent entirely. These significant organisational deficiencies place the response at Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is extremely basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text. Examples include 'tow' for two, 'blow' for below, 'toa' for to, 'hostpital' for hospital, 'acr' for car, and 'bos sation' for bus station. The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'ring road', 'bus station', and 'car park', but the high frequency of basic lexical errors and misspellings severely restricts communication and strains the reader, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structure is severely flawed, consisting of fragmented run-on clauses rather than properly formed sentences. There is a complete lack of punctuation, missing articles, and persistent basic errors in word order and subject-verb agreement. The student fails to demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms accurately, and the high density of grammatical errors constantly impedes understanding. This performance corresponds to a Band 4.0.
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