Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
As far as ths topic is concerned,the given graph show the information about road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Overall,it is clear that there are some noticeable trends and difference.Some aspects increase while other decrease and a few remain relatively stable.
At the begining of the period.We saw that there are some same things we saw on map the hospital is on the same place ring road is around the hospital.These things are relative same from 2007 to 2010.There is a bus station on left side in 2007 but in 2010 there is a public car park
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student has failed to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 101 words, which significantly impacts the score for Task Achievement. Furthermore, the response is largely undeveloped and contains memorised, irrelevant template phrases at the beginning ('As far as ths topic is concerned...'). While the student correctly identifies a few changes between the two maps, such as the addition of a public car park, the overview is extremely basic and fails to fully summarise the main features and comparisons required by the task prompt. Consequently, the ideas are limited, under-developed, and the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response lacks proper paragraphing, consisting of only three short, poorly connected blocks of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with clumsy transitions such as 'At the begining of the period.We saw that...' creating a disjointed flow. The overall logical progression is weak, and referencing between sentences is often unclear, meaning that information and ideas are not arranged coherently enough to reach a higher band level.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on simple terms found directly in the prompt (e.g., 'hospital', 'ring road', 'bus station', 'car park'). There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'ths' instead of 'this', 'begining' instead of 'beginning', and 'relative same' instead of 'relatively the same'. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for communication, but errors and lack of less common vocabulary prevent it from reaching Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent punctuation and capitalisation errors (e.g., missing spaces after commas and periods, such as 'Overall,it is clear...'). Attempts at more complex structures are faulty or absent. Grammatical errors are frequent, including tense inconsistencies ('We saw that there are...') and missing articles, which can cause some difficulty for the reader.
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