Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The maps illustrates that in 2007 between 2010 how many changings came in road access to city hospital.
Overall,it is clear that both maps have a difference in each other.And here the most noticeble point is Ring Roads.And the other thing city hospitals.Therefore here we will discuss about the both changings.
In 2007,the ring road was surrounding the city hospital and the ring road was connected from the city road.Hospital road also attached with the ring road.And on the east side had bus stop.Car park was also connected between the ring road and city road.It was for both staff and public.
In 2010,ring road was surrounding of city hospital and staff car park was attached on the south side in the right side and the bus station was the left side and thier between was hospital road.And along the car par the city road was connected.And the East side was public car park.And the next was roundabout system.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the main changes between the two maps of the city hospital in 2007 and 2010. However, the coverage of key features is very basic and contains inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, the text mentions that the ring road surrounded the hospital in both years, but misses significant developments such as the addition of roundabouts, the relocation and restructuring of car parks (staff vs. public), and the transformation of individual bus stops into a designated bus station. The overview is extremely brief and conversational ('And here the most noticeble point is Ring Roads'), failing to provide a clear, professional summary of the overall trends. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into four paragraphs representing an introduction, an overview, and descriptions of 2007 and 2010 respectively. However, the logical progression and cohesion are severely hindered by repetitive phrasing, conversational filler, and mechanical transitions (e.g., 'And the other thing', 'Therefore here we will discuss'). Paragraphing is attempted, but individual sentences lack smooth internal cohesion and referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'thier between was hospital road'). While there is a basic structure, the overall flow is choppy and repetitive, justifying a band score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic nouns and verbs such as 'road', 'hospital', 'car park', and 'connected'. There are noticeable word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'changings' instead of 'changes', 'noticeble', and 'thier' instead of 'their'. Less common vocabulary is virtually absent, and the overall register is informal and conversational. These lexical limitations and errors cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the descriptors for a band score of 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex forms that result in faulty grammar, awkward phrasing, and run-on sentences (e.g., 'The maps illustrates that in 2007 between 2010 how many changings came in road access to city hospital.'). Errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The maps illustrates'), prepositions, and word order are frequent throughout the text. Although basic meaning can sometimes be extracted, the high frequency of grammatical errors consistently impedes clear communication, resulting in a band score of 4.5.
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