Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two maps depicts the changes happened in 3 years fron 2007 to 2010. There are enormous changes in road access to a city hospital. As shown in maps there are some very noticeable differences.
In 2007, there was a city hospital on northern side and it was surrounded by ring road. There was a hospital rosd right in front of hospital and a parking alot for staff and public. The hospital road was leaded directly to the city road.There were six bus stands on both side of hospital road.
after 3 years in 2010, the city hospital was remained in same place. The public parking was built separatly from staff parking on the eastern side just right to the hospital. The hospital road structure was also changed in 2010. There was a bus station built across the hospital road. Two roundabout are also built on the two sides of hospital road.
In conclusion, the road access to city hospital was developed. The changes makes life easy for people.There were so many things that changed in those 3 years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the two maps, noting the physical changes to the city hospital area between 2007 and 2010. The student successfully identifies key alterations such as the addition of roundabouts, the separation of staff and public parking, the new bus station, and the removal of individual bus stops along Hospital Road. An overview is present at the end of the text, stating that road access developed and conditions improved. However, some descriptions lack precision, such as stating 'the city hospital was remained in same place' rather than detailing the surrounding infrastructure changes more comprehensively. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, placing this performance at a Band 6.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay is organized into four paragraphs, moving from an introduction to the 2007 map, the 2010 map, and a brief concluding summary. There is a coherent overall arrangement, and basic chronological sequencing is attempted using phrases like 'In 2007' and 'after 3 years in 2010'. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, as seen in abrupt transitions and referencing errors (e.g., 'The hospital road was leaded directly' and repetitive sentence openings). Paragraphing is utilized, but the conclusion is overly simplistic and repetitive. These cohesion limitations place the response firmly in Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms like 'surrounded', 'infrastructure', and 'parking'. However, there are noticeable spelling errors ('fron' instead of 'from', 'roasd' instead of 'road', 'alot' instead of 'a lot', 'separatly') and awkward word choices or collocations ('was remained', 'parking alot', 'bus stands'). Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success. While communication is not severely hindered, the accumulation of lexical inaccuracies prevents the response from reaching Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'As shown in maps there are some very noticeable differences.' However, control over grammar and sentence structure is weak, featuring frequent errors such as passive voice misuse ('was remained'), incorrect verb forms ('was leaded directly', 'Two roundabout are also built'), and punctuation omissions. Errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the structures from achieving reliable accuracy, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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