Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
There is two maps show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.today im talking about the information and main features of city hospital before and after.
Although, 1st im talking about city hospital in 2007. Mainly hospital is 2 road one is city road and other is hospital main road , In the right of main hospital road are car park staff and public together. in additionally right side corner bus stop only. and city hospital outer side is ring road.That is the full map information city hospital 2007.
Moreover, talking about 2010 city hospital in 2010. then hospital outside one main road is city road and round about hospital road in right and left side both changes are left side is bus station or right side are staff car park only. At last, main is city hospital main gate round about or left side is only public car park or full covered by ring road. In the same way 2010 are lots of changes before 2007.
Like wise , 2007 and 2010 in big difference is staff or public parking are separte and two round about main hospital road. Additionally, bus station is closed in 2010 to city hospital .
In my conclusion, 2010 city hospital give better facilities before 2007. its more easy to access things like parking , bus station .and looking more modern.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the main features of the maps from 2007 and 2010, identifying key changes such as the separation of car parks, the addition of roundabouts, and the bus station. However, the structure of the response relies heavily on conversational phrasing ('today im talking about', '1st im talking about', 'In my conclusion') rather than a formal academic summary. The description of positions is sometimes vague or inaccurate based on the visual data, and the overview at the end is very brief and simplistic. It partially addresses the task requirements, but lacks the appropriate register and precise reporting expected for Academic Task 1, corresponding to Band 4.5 rounded to 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are weak. The writer uses informal discourse markers and repetitive transitions like 'Moreover, talking about 2010' and 'At last'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow spatial relationships on the maps (for example, 'That is the full map information city hospital 2007'). There is an absence of sophisticated or smooth cohesive devices, resulting in a disjointed structure that affects overall readability. This performance aligns with the Band 4 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily influenced by spoken or informal English ('big difference', 'lots of changes', 'more easy'). There are several inappropriate word choices and collocations (e.g., 'bus station is closed in 2010 to city hospital', 'give better facilities'). Spelling and punctuation issues are also present, such as lowercase 'i' and non-standard capitalization. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey a minimal message about the maps, it is limited and shows noticeable errors, fitting the Band 4 criteria.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences or faulty attempts at complex ones. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('There is two maps'), missing articles ('in 2010 city hospital give better facilities'), and incorrect prepositions ('in the right of main hospital road'). Punctuation is also poorly handled, with run-on sentences and misused commas. These frequent errors cause strain for the reader and reflect a Band 4 level.
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