Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Introduction: The two maps illustrate road connectivity to a city hospital over the time period of three years.

Overview: Overall, it is crystal clear that major advancement can be seen around the city hospital in three years. Some features remained unchanged. While, two roundabouts and a staff car park had been introduced.

In 2007, there was a ring road incircling the city hospital. After three years this track experienced no change. The hospital road which was directly linked to the city hospital saw a major alteration. In 2010, it was between two roundabouts. The car park which was previously shared by both staff and public was separated. The public car park was built on the right side of the city hospital. While, the staff car park was constructed in front of the hospital. A bus station was introduced by two roundabouts in 2010. The city road showed no change in position in either year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons between the 2007 and 2010 maps of the city hospital. The overview correctly identifies key developments, such as the introduction of roundabouts, a bus station, and changes to car parks. The student accurately notes that Ring Road and City Road remained unchanged, while Hospital Road underwent significant alterations. The response is fully supported by the visual data provided, with details such as the separation of the staff and public car parks clearly highlighted. There are no major omissions or inaccuracies, demonstrating a strong understanding of the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression from an introductory sentence to an overview paragraph, followed by specific body details. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'While', 'After three years', and 'In 2010'. However, paragraphing could be improved; the text is divided into an introduction, an overview paragraph, and a block of detail sentences that lack internal paragraph breaks to separate distinct areas of the map (e.g., roads versus facilities). Referencing is generally clear, although some transitional phrasing feels slightly mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for an academic task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'connectivity', 'advancement', 'alteration', and 'incircling'. There are occasional word choice and spelling inaccuracies, such as 'incircling' instead of 'encircling', and informal phrasing like 'crystal clear' in the overview, which is less suited to an academic report. Nevertheless, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main features and comparisons clearly without impeding communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including relative clauses ('which was directly linked') and subordinate clauses ('While, two roundabouts and a staff car park had been introduced'). Grammatical control is generally decent, but there are some errors, including punctuation and sentence fragment issues (e.g., 'While, two roundabouts and a staff car park had been introduced.' starting with a conjunction and a comma) and tense inconsistencies. Despite these errors, meaning is generally clear and communication is rarely impeded.

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