Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two maps illustrate the road access to a city hospital from the year 2007 to 2010.
Overall, the 2010 map shows the reconstruction and redesign of the previous city hospital. They have underwent some extensive modernization which comprise a public car park, separated from the staff as in 2007, located at the eastern side of the hospital wall. Other modifications include two roundabouts, in the middle, on the southern side, joining the hospital road to provide better transit facilities. A development of bus station at the south-west corner is also noted, typically connecting the station with the two roundabouts to allow a smoother traffic flow.
Firstly, there is a map of a city hospital in 2007, highlighting the infrastructure of a combined car parking used by both the staff and public. Public car park is constructed at the north-eastern side of the wall, whereas the staff car parking is still occupied by the old place.
Secondly, Two roundabouts were clearly shown at each corner of the road, adjacent to the hospital. Additionally, a bus stop also joined both the roundabouts available on the road straight to the city hospital, whereas, the old map shows that the bus stops were on the opposite sides of the road, facing city road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by describing the main changes between the 2007 and 2010 maps of the city hospital. An overview is present, noting the reconstruction and redesign, and several key features are mentioned, such as the new public car park, the separation of staff and public parking, the two roundabouts, and the bus station. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and contradictory statements regarding spatial locations. For instance, the student states that the public car park is located at the eastern side of the hospital wall, whereas the 2010 map shows it on the east side of Ring Road, and later contradicts this by stating it is constructed at the north-eastern side. Furthermore, the description of the bus stops and station is slightly confused. Consequently, the task is only partially well-covered, fitting a Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged into multiple paragraphs, including an introduction and an overall summary. However, the logical progression is hindered by confusing transitions and repetitive referencing. The use of sequence markers like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' in the latter paragraphs does not effectively structure the comparison and instead creates a fragmented layout. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'the old place' and 'the old map shows that the bus stops were on the opposite sides of the road'. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, pulling the score to a Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases such as 'reconstruction', 'modernization', 'transit facilities', and 'adjacent'. However, there are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'They have underwent some extensive modernization' (incorrect verb form and collocation) and 'staff car parking is still occupied by the old place'. Word formation errors and imprecise phrasing constrain the lexical range to a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several noticeable grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement and tense/aspect mistakes: 'They have underwent' (should be 'have undergone'), 'comprise' (should be 'comprises'), and punctuation/phrasing issues in complex clauses. While meaning is generally conveyed despite these errors, the frequency of grammatical slips prevents the response from reaching Band 6.0, placing it firmly at a Band 5.5.
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