Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The map shows how does the road towards city hospital looked in 2007 and 2010.

Overall, it is clear that new facilities is introduced for both public and staff.

In 2007, city hospital is surrounded by the ring road and at the center of the hospital the road is present which is called hospital road, at the right side of the hospital road car parking facility is available for both staff and public. In the east side of the hospital a bus stop is present.In 2010, more efficient use of space is carrried out as at the right side of the public hospital a public car parking has been introduced. At the east side of the hospital a new Roundabout is made in place of bus stop and at the right side of the hospitat road parking space for staff is made and on the right side of road a new and better city bus stop has been introduced

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to summarise the main features of the two maps, noting the introduction of new facilities such as car parks, roundabouts, and a bus station between 2007 and 2010. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and omissions regarding spatial relationships and locations. For instance, the student states that the bus stop was replaced by a roundabout on the east side, whereas the source map shows bus stops removed along Hospital Road and a new bus station and public car park added. Furthermore, some descriptions are vague or repetitive. The overview is somewhat basic ('new facilities is introduced for both public and staff'). This performance aligns with Band 5, as it addresses the task partially with some unclear and inaccurate details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe structural deficiencies. It is written as a single, poorly structured block of text containing only two very long sentences separated awkwardly, which fails to use paragraphing effectively. Cohesive devices are minimal and repetitive (e.g., overusing 'at the right side of', 'on the right side', 'and'). Logical progression is hindered by run-on clauses and a lack of clear transitions between the overview and the body details. Pronoun referencing is also weak in places ('the road is present which is called hospital road'). This corresponds to Band 4, as information and ideas are not arranged cohesively, and paragraphing is absent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple directional phrases ('right side', 'east side') and elementary terms ('road', 'hospital', 'car parking'). There are noticeable word formation and collocation errors, such as 'carrried out' (spelling error) and 'public hospital' instead of city hospital. Attempts at less common vocabulary are limited ('efficient use of space'), but inaccuracies in word choice cause some confusion. This fits the Band 5 descriptor, where the lexical range is limited and noticeable errors occur.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple and awkwardly joined compound sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('new facilities is introduced'), missing articles ('the map shows how does the road...'), tense inconsistencies, and incorrect clause structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences lacking proper terminal punctuation. Because errors are frequent and occasionally obscure meaning, this corresponds to a Band 4 level.

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