Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given maps illustrate the city hospital road changes throughout the 2007 and 2010.
Overall, after this worked on city hospital they were looked numerous changes. New develop car parking two roundabou and transport services for people.
Primarily, they were car park, staff and public placed on right side in 2007 However, In 2010 they develop the city hospital just see the car parking staff on right side of city road or roundabout turn the straight of bus station.
Before there were not public car park Moreover, In 2007 east side of ring road they built the huge public car park.
A futher point to consider,Before just looked the north side of city road they were see the six bus stop and straight city hospital. Futhermore, In 2010 they were developed the seperate big bus station and that location was roundabout west side. In addion, also looked the second roundabout they were see the ring road and city hospital.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes shown in the maps, noting the addition of roundabouts, a bus station, and car parking changes. However, the information is communicated with significant confusion and inaccuracies. For example, the writer states that in 2007 there was a car park 'placed on right side' and in 2010 'they develop the city hospital just see the car parking staff on right side of city road'. The comparison between the two years is difficult to follow, and key features like the new public car park on the east side of Ring Road are poorly explained. The overview provided in the second paragraph is fragmented and unclear. Overall, the response meets the minimum word count but falls short of addressing the task fully and clearly, placing it firmly at Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the text is very weak, lacking clear overall progression. Although the writer attempts paragraphing, the internal structure of each paragraph is chaotic and disjointed. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'Primarily, they were car park', 'Before there were not public car park Moreover', and 'A futher point to consider'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to determine what the writer is referring to (e.g., 'that location was roundabout west side'). The progression of ideas does not follow a logical spatial or chronological path, which heavily disrupts the flow of reading. These features correspond to a Band 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and frequently incorrect. The student relies on rudimentary words like 'car park', 'road', and 'bus station', but struggles significantly with word choice and collocation (e.g., 'New develop car parking two roundabou', 'transport services', 'turn the straight of bus station'). There are also noticeable spelling errors such as 'roundabou', 'futher', and 'addion'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for discussing map transformations effectively, straining the reader's understanding. This level aligns with Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of structures, and almost every sentence contains severe errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, word order, and basic sentence construction. Examples include 'the city hospital road changes throughout the 2007 and 2010', 'they were looked numerous changes', and 'they were see the six bus stop and straight city hospital'. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, and errors frequently distort the intended meaning, causing persistent difficulty for the reader. This performance reflects the descriptors for Band 4.0.
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