Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The map of City Hospital in 2007. When we enter to the city from city road from the east side. When we enter from city road, after covering a few distance at the upper side on the right hand which is actually a north side, from here the hospital road is started. As we enter to the hospital road. There is a ring road when we enter to the ring road taking a compete around of the road and now appear to the parking area of staff and pubic. At the center of the ring road, that is the palce where actual the City Hospital is located. At the east side, out from the city hospital area the Bus stop is located.
The map of City Hospital in 2010. You enter from east side and taking a roundabout and enter to the city road and agin there is roundabout and know there is four path one is straight west and one is to the south and one is to the north between the west and north there is another road which goes to the bus station. And the road which is on the north side that is hospital road. And know there is round about at we turn to the east side there is the staf car parking at the lower end and when we take round about and turn to the west side there is a ring road which goes to the public car parking, this is also located on the east side. And at the center of ring road there is city hospital.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to describe the two maps of City Hospital in 2007 and 2010, but it fails to provide a proper summary or overview of the changes. Instead of objective reporting, the writing adopts a confusing conversational narrative style ('When we enter to the city...'). Furthermore, key features such as the new bus station, the second roundabout, and the separation of staff and public car parks are described in a very convoluted and imprecise manner. Several details are misread or confused, resulting in an inadequate fulfillment of the task requirements. This corresponds to a band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is very weak. The response lacks a clear overall progression and is divided into only two long, messy paragraphs that try to narrate a journey through the map rather than summarising spatial changes. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying heavily on repetitive and conversational phrases like 'When we enter' and 'And know there is'. Paragraphing is inadequate as the layout fails to separate the two time periods logically or clearly. This level of organisation aligns with a band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary is extremely basic, repetitive, and heavily influenced by spoken style. The student uses very simple words ('road', 'side', 'area', 'center') and struggles with correct collocations and word forms (e.g., 'covering a few distance', 'compete around', 'staf car parking'). There are frequent spelling errors such as 'pubic' instead of 'public', 'agin' instead of 'again', and 'know' instead of 'now'. The limited lexical range and frequent errors restrict the response to a band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structure is severely limited and often inaccurate. The text consists largely of fragmented clauses or run-on sentences joined improperly by conjunctions like 'and' and 'when' (e.g., 'As we enter to the hospital road. There is a ring road...'). There is a complete lack of control over complex sentence structures, and basic grammatical rules such as subject-verb agreement and prepositional use are frequently violated. Errors are pervasive and constantly impede the reader's understanding, placing this performance at a band 4.0.
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