Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The map represents road uses to a urban hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Overall, it can be noticed, in 2007, there were many bus stop in this map. However, in 2010, there were two circle road, as well as, two car parked area.

To begin with, city hospital in 2007, in the North side it was ring road around the hospital. Moreover, the hospital road connected to the hospital. If came to the South side, the hospital road beside the West and the East side, there were bus stop and in the South-East side, it was city road connected to the hospital road.

On the other side, in 2010, city hospital plan, the ring road and city hospital as it was but, the public car park attected to the ring road beside the hospital. In addition, the hospital road located in similar place. However, the hospital attected with two circles. First roundabout connected with the hospital and second roundabout attected with the city road. It was also include the staff car park area in the South side and the bus station located in the West side of the map.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main features of the maps comparing road access in 2007 and 2010. While an overall trend is attempted, it is overly simplistic and grammatically flawed. Several key changes are mentioned, such as the replacement of individual bus stops with a bus station, the addition of two roundabouts, and changes to car parking. However, the description of locations and spatial relationships is frequently vague, confusing, and imprecise. For instance, stating that 'the hospital road located in similar place' lacks necessary detail. The task is addressed partially, aligning with Band 5 descriptors due to limited and underdeveloped ideas combined with unclear positioning of features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, starting with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs dedicated to 2007 and 2010 respectively. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing, run-on sentences, and poor transitions (e.g., 'If came to the South side', 'On the other side, in 2010, city hospital plan'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically and inaccurately, leading to a choppy and disjointed reading experience. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion fails to maintain a clear, logical flow throughout the essay. This corresponds to a Band 5 level.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms (e.g., 'map', 'road', 'hospital', 'car park', 'bus stop'). There are frequent word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'circle road' instead of 'roundabout', 'car parked area' instead of 'car park', and 'attected' instead of 'attached' or 'added'. Less common lexical items are attempted but handled incorrectly, which strains the reader and restricts the lexical score to Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures are almost invariably faulty or incomplete (e.g., 'Overall, it can be noticed, in 2007, there were many bus stop in this map', 'First roundabout connected with the hospital and second roundabout attected with the city road'). There are persistent errors in articles, pluralization, prepositions, and verb forms throughout the text. These frequent errors impede communication and place the grammar at a Band 4 level.

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