Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The two maps illustrate lane access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Overall, 2007, ring road northern side and car parking and public area is left and right side of the hospital road. 2010, public car park is easten side and bus station are the west side. Roundabout are connected to different side.

To begin with, in 2007, ring lane north side of the map and bus stop east and west side of the hospital road. City road is south side and connected with hospital road.

Furthermore, in 2010, city hospital have massive change and a lot of innovation such as public car park is huge area beside the hospital east side. Roundabout are conected witgh bus station and hospital road. Bus station is west side and also innovated staff car park in east side the hospital road in middle of roundabout and city road are also connected with roundabout.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover the main changes between the two maps, such as the addition of roundabouts, the relocation of the bus station, and the separation of car parks. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and underdeveloped manner. While an overall trend is attempted in the second paragraph, it lacks clarity and precision. Key features like the transformation of individual bus stops into a designated bus station and the addition of the new public car park are mentioned loosely, but the lack of a clear, coherent overview and poor integration of data restrict the task achievement. The response reaches the minimum word count, but the descriptive coverage remains basic and lacks a well-supported comparative structure.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is divided into short, disjointed paragraphs that fail to establish a smooth logical progression. Although cohesive markers like 'To begin with' and 'Furthermore' are used, they introduce poorly structured sentences and isolated phrases rather than cohesive arguments. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is illogical, with single sentences acting as paragraphs in some instances. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the hospital, roads, and surrounding amenities. Overall cohesion is faulty and mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on simple terms like 'car park', 'bus station', 'hospital road', and 'roundabout'. There are several noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'lane access' instead of 'road access', 'innovated staff car park', and 'easten side'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with significant inaccuracy. While the vocabulary is just about adequate to identify the physical features shown on the maps, the numerous lexical errors and limited range restrict the score to the lower bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly formed fragments, such as 'In 2010, public car park is easten side and bus station are the west side.' There are frequent and severe grammatical errors involving missing verbs, incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'in easten side the hospital road'), and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'Roundabout are connected'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when they are, they are inaccurate. These pervasive errors frequently strain the reader's understanding.

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