Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams provide information about the road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.

Overall it can be noticed clearly that the major developments has taken place such as different bus stops repalced by a major bus station, two roundabouts were built to reduce traffic, remaining the hospital unchanged over three years.

Initially in 2007 there were 6 bus stops along the both side of hospital road ,now these stops were repalced with a major bus station. Similarly to reduced the traffic on hospital road two roundabouts were installed. One is on the north side of the hospital road, another one is on the south side of hospital road.

In 2010 City hospital remained unchnaged. However earlier there were single shared car parking available at the east side of hospital road, now replaced with staff car parking only and the public car parking shifted at east side of city hospital.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by providing an overview of the main changes to the hospital road access between 2007 and 2010. The selection of features is mostly accurate, highlighting key developments such as the replacement of individual bus stops with a bus station, the addition of two roundabouts, and the reorganisation of the car parks. However, some details are slightly inaccurate or under-developed; for instance, the text states that 'the hospital remained unchanged over three years,' while noting alterations to its immediate access roads and car parks, which leads to a slight contradiction. Furthermore, the overview touches upon the main trends, but the comparison between the two years could be extended further to fully reach a higher level of development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The text demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to organise information into logical paragraphs representing an introduction, overview, and body details. However, the progression of ideas is occasionally disrupted by mechanical and faulty cohesive devices. Words like 'Initially' and 'However' are used, but referencing is sometimes unclear, such as shifting abruptly between past and present timeframes without smooth transitions. Paragraphing is present, but the grouping of ideas lacks seamless flow, as sentences within the body paragraphs are disjointed. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to ensure that cohesive devices connect sentences and paragraphs more naturally and that the logical progression from one feature to the next is clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'developments,' 'repalced' (repalced), and 'unchanged.' However, there are noticeable spelling errors ('repalced' instead of replaced, 'unchnaged' instead of unchanged) and awkward word choices or collocations, such as 'shared car parking' and 'public car parking shifted at east side.' While these lexical shortcomings do not seriously impede communication, they restrict the score. To improve, the writer should focus on accurate word forms, correct spelling, and more natural collocations when describing spatial relationships and map transformations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response employs a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt to use relative clauses and prepositional phrases. There are, however, a number of grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('now these stops were repalced'), missing articles ('on the both side'), and preposition errors ('at the east side' instead of on the east side). Punctuation and comma splices also occur, such as in the overview sentence. Although these errors rarely impede the overall communication of the message, they persist frequently enough to prevent the response from achieving a higher band. Improving control over verb tenses for describing map changes and refining article usage will enhance grammatical accuracy.

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