Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The digram depicts the development of road to the urban health care center from 2007 to 2010 Overall, it is clearly seen that there is massive change in simillar digrams like as introduction of new things as well as road get more broader To initate with the first and the formost change is there is only one car parking space in year 2007 in contrast there is saprate car parking for public as well as staff moreover bus station is shiffted near the city hospital Furthermore,in year 2007 the there was only single road which goes straight towards healt center in contrast in year 2010 roundabout where developed which attach bus ststion with hospital moreover public car parking is get attach with city hospital
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the main developments shown in the maps, such as the introduction of roundabouts, the relocation of the bus station, and the separation of staff and public car parks. However, the length requirement is not met, as the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 124 words. Due to this under-length, the overview is rather basic and the development of ideas remains limited and slightly generalised, such as stating roads got broader without clear supporting detail from the maps. To reach a higher level, the writer must ensure the word count requirement is fulfilled and provide a more fully developed account of the spatial changes over the three-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response exhibits some overall organisation, attempting an introduction followed by body paragraphs with sequencing phrases such as 'To initate with' and 'Furthermore'. However, progression is somewhat mechanical due to poor punctuation and a lack of full stops or sentence boundaries, resulting in a run-on structure in places. Referencing between sentences and ideas is occasionally unclear, and cohesive devices are over-used or inaccurate. Paragraphing is attempted, but the lack of internal punctuation hinders logical flow. To improve cohesion, the writer should use proper sentence boundaries, varied and accurate cohesive markers, and ensure that ideas are clearly grouped into distinct, punctuated sentences.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, with frequent spelling errors such as 'digram', 'simillar', 'initate', 'formost', 'saprate', 'shiffted', and 'healt'. Word choices are basic, and attempts at less common vocabulary lead to noticeable errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'urban health care center' and 'public car parking is get attach'. These lexical slips cause some difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to expand their range of functional vocabulary for describing map transformations, improve spelling accuracy, and employ more precise phrasing for geographical and structural changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on basic clauses joined loosely together. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, marred by missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect prepositions, and severe punctuation deficiencies, such as missing periods between independent clauses. Examples include 'there is only one car parking space in year 2007 in contrast there is saprate car parking' and 'roundabout where developed'. Frequent errors in agreement, articles, and verb forms cause strain and difficulty for the reader. To improve, the student must focus on sentence boundaries, accurate tense usage for historical data, and foundational grammatical accuracy.
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