Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

we comparison road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.fistly the 2007 city hospital road access were very unique.when we enter the city road on east side then the north side are hospital road.In the hospital road present a car park or staff and public.and the front of hospital road are city hospital.and around the city hospital are a ring road that looks very exthatic.the east side of city hospital are a bus stop.and city hospital at 2010 look like a latest version.when we enter the city road on east side then the north side of city road are a hospital road.and the west side of hospital road are a bus stationand east side of hospital road are astaff and car park.and the front of hospital road are city hospital.the east side of city hospital are a public and a car park.and the same as same ring road such that city hospital in 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response responds to the task only minimally and fails to meet the word count requirement, falling short by 3 words after excluding prompt-copied material. The student attempts to report changes between the two maps, such as mentioning the new public car park and the bus station in 2010, but the information is presented in a very confused and repetitive manner. Key features are inadequately selected and poorly reported, with vague descriptions like "look like a latest version" and "ring road that looks very exthatic." There is no clear overview of the overall changes that took place between 2007 and 2010, resulting in a minimal attempt at summarising the visual data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently in this response. The text lacks any paragraphing, appearing as a single dense block of text, which makes the progression extremely difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, relying on repetitive transitional phrases like "when we enter" and "and the west side" rather than logical connectors appropriate for describing maps. The referencing between the 2007 features and the 2010 features is confused, creating a jumbled narrative where spatial relationships are obscured.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, employing simple words and frequent inaccuracies that strain the reader. The student relies heavily on elementary descriptions, using words like "latest version" and spelling errors such as "fistly" instead of firstly and "exthatic" instead of aesthetic. There is a lack of precise spatial and geographical vocabulary needed for Task 1 map descriptions, such as 'situated', 'relocated', or 'demolished'. While basic communication of some visual elements is attempted, the limited range and word-choice errors restrict the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions. Errors are frequent throughout the text, including severe punctuation issues (such as missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and missing spaces after periods), subject-verb agreement errors like "road access were" and "north side are", and incorrect article usage. These frequent errors distort meaning and make the grammatical control weak, reflecting basic sentence structures with persistent mechanical slips.

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