Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The map illurates the 2007 and 2010 road access of city hospital.
city hospital in 2007 has full saqure ring road south side hospital road .Hospital road south east conner car parking of public and staff. In the fornt on the hospital road is city road west to east .
City Hospital in 2010 full saqure ring road and the east side of the hospital public car park.In the fornt of the hospital one round about west to south conner road go to bus station and south side road is city hospital.East side of the hospital road a staff car park and end on the hospital road one more roundabout south west conner connect with bus station and east side of the roundabout is cityroad
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response falls well short of the minimum word count of 150 words, stopping at only 125 words, which severely restricts the extent of the answer. While the student attempts to describe the maps of City Hospital in 2007 and 2010 by mentioning features such as the ring road, car parks, and new roundabouts, the selection of information is very limited and lacks a clear overview. Key changes, such as the addition of the new public car park and the bus station, are mentioned in a fragmented and underdeveloped manner, making it difficult to follow the overall comparison between the two years. To improve, the response must meet the minimum length requirement and provide a fully developed summary highlighting the most salient changes across the two time periods.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The organization of the response is extremely basic and lacks clear overall progression. The text is broken into very short, disjointed sentences and paragraphs that do not flow logically from one idea to the next. Cohesive devices are largely absent, and referencing is unclear—for instance, phrases like 'In the fornt of the hospital' are used repetitively and clumsily to transition between spatial locations. There is no clear framework guiding the reader through the comparison of the two maps. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to group related information into cohesive paragraphs, use a wider range of connecting words and phrases to link spatial relationships, and ensure a clear logical flow throughout the description.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms such as 'road', 'hospital', 'car park', and 'round about'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'illurates', 'saqure', 'conner', and 'fornt'. Word choice and collocation are frequently awkward or inaccurate, such as 'full saqure ring road' and 'road go to bus station'. These lexical limitations and errors place a heavy strain on the reader. To improve, the student must expand their range of vocabulary, learn correct spellings of common descriptive terms, and practice accurate collocations related to maps and spatial features.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, fragmented sentences with frequent missing verbs and articles (e.g., 'The map illurates', 'city hospital in 2007 has...'). Errors in grammar are frequent and severe, including missing subjects, incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'on the hospital road is city road'), and poor sentence boundaries where clauses are incorrectly strung together without punctuation. These errors often obscure the intended meaning. To reach a higher band, the writer needs to demonstrate control over basic sentence structures, ensure every sentence contains a main verb and proper subject, use articles correctly, and incorporate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms.
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