Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps below compares the avabiality of road to the hospital in the city in two different years 2007 and 2010.

Overall, some major changes can be seen at the eastern and southern sides. The construction of roundabout, bus station and public car parking are the main changes occured by the period, near to the hospital.

At the first glance, the ring road looks similar which passes through around the hospital permises while, large car parking area has been constructed for the citizen to the eastern side of the hospital area, connecting directly to the ring road. The unmanaged bus stops has been converted to the bus station to the western side of the hospital main road.

Furthermore, seperate car parking has been constructed to the east southern side of the hospital area, directly connecting it with the ring road. Also, two large roundabouts have been constructed in the hospital road. One of the roundabout is exactly infornt of the hospital gate, and other is at the junction of hospital road and city road.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main transformation clearly: the bus stops were replaced by a bus station, parking was reorganised, and two roundabouts were added. Your overview also highlights the broad scale of change, and most locations are reported accurately. However, there are some factual imprecisions: the new public car park is east of the Ring Road, not simply on the eastern side of the hospital, while the separate staff car park is east of Hospital Road; describing it as “east southern” and saying it connects directly to the Ring Road is misleading. The roundabout at the northern end is at the Ring Road junction, rather than “exactly in front of the hospital gate.” More precise comparisons between the 2007 and 2010 layouts would strengthen the account.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing changes. The sequence from general changes to parking and transport features is generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “Also” help signal progression. This organisation is effective, but some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “At the first glance” introduces several features in one long sentence, and “Furthermore” does not make the relationship between the two parking changes especially clear. The overview also repeats details that are developed immediately afterwards. Grouping the changes more deliberately—road layout, bus facilities, then parking—and using clearer references would make the progression smoother and more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “roundabout,” “bus station,” “car parking,” “junction,” and “connecting directly,” so the reader can understand the main changes. There is also some attempt to vary wording, such as “construction” and “converted.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision: “avabiality of road,” “hospital permises,” “unmanaged bus stops,” and “car parking area … for the citizen” are not natural or accurate descriptions. “Construction … occurred” is also an awkward collocation. Aim for concise, conventional map language such as “road access,” “hospital grounds,” “bus stops were replaced by a bus station,” and “a public car park was added.” Check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “while” and “which,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors occur across sentence structures and often make descriptions less clear. For example, “The maps below compares” has subject–verb disagreement, while “The construction … are the main changes occured” combines an incorrect verb form with an incomplete clause. Articles and number are also inconsistent in “The unmanaged bus stops has been converted” and “One of the roundabout is.” The sentence beginning “At the first glance” is overloaded, and its “while” clause is not punctuated or structured clearly. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions, agreement, articles, and shorter complex sentences; these would make your comparisons easier to follow.

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