Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given two maps illustrates the changes of city hospital between period of 2007 to 2010.
By looking the changes in map closely, in 2007 there are 6 bus stops on both sides of Hospital road, while in 2010 map there are whole bus station at the west side of hospital road. Further more 2 Roundabouts are constructed for convenience at the start and end of city hospital which have access to bus station in new map. Additionally public car park separate from staff car park and shifted to the east side of Hospital.
Moreover, Ring road is remain at same place and connected to public car park. which make easy for patient to come hospital without any traffic jams problems. What is more, the city road remain unchanged, which is in the south side of map.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify several important changes: the six individual bus stops were replaced by a bus station, two roundabouts were added, and parking was separated into staff and public facilities. However, the account is only partial and the overview is not clearly stated. The public car park is described as being shifted east of the hospital, whereas it was newly provided east of the Ring Road; the existing car park beside Hospital Road became the staff car park. The claim that the Ring Road connects to the public car park is broadly relevant, but the explanation about avoiding traffic jams is not shown by the maps. The response also falls 13 words short of the required 150, limiting the detail available. Report the main changes more precisely and include a concise overview.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic sequence, moving from bus facilities and roundabouts to parking and roads, and linking phrases such as “Additionally” and “Moreover” help signal new points. However, the information is compressed into two paragraphs without a clear overview or a strong progression from the main changes to unchanged features. Some links are awkward or unclear: “Further more 2 Roundabouts are constructed for convenience at the start and end of city hospital” does not clearly identify the road intersections, and “which make easy” has an unclear reference. The final points about the Ring Road and City Road could be grouped as unchanged features. Use a clearer overview followed by organised details, and make each reference explicit.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant map vocabulary, including “bus stops,” “bus station,” “Roundabouts,” “staff car park,” and “Ring road,” so the reader can follow the general subject. There is some variety in how changes are described, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural for a map report. “Shifted to the east side of Hospital” misrepresents the new public car park’s position, while “at the start and end of city hospital” is not a clear way to describe the roundabouts. Phrases such as “for convenience” and “traffic jams problems” add unsupported or awkward wording. Aim for precise location language and standard collocations, such as “at the junctions” and “to the east of the Ring Road.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, including a sentence beginning “while” and another using “which.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “The given two maps illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, and “By looking the changes” is missing a required preposition. “Ring road is remain at same place” combines incompatible verb forms and omits an article, while “which make easy” has agreement and sentence-structure problems. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “Hospital road” and the lower-case sentence after “car park.” Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and build longer sentences around clear, correctly linked clauses.
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