Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two maps illustrates the transformation of road acess to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

overall, the map in 2010 highlights the significant development as public car parking has been seperately build and staff car parking has seperately build.The most striking change was the development of bus station.

in 2007 the city hospital was covered with the ring road and that ring was connected with the hospital road at the southern side of the hospital.the hospital road bisects the city road. so if someone want to come hospital from the city road they need to move to there right to get on the hospital road that led to hospital. at the right side of hospital road there was space allocated for car parking for the staff and general public.the bus stop was quite far away from the hospital as it is situated at the right side of the hospital.

whereas the upgraded map of 2010 shows the major development as the car parking for both the public and staff has been seperately build and at the left side of hospital road the new bus station has been built and compared to 2007 map there was no roundabout built but in 2010 the couple of new roundabout has been built one at the city road and second one is at the right side of the hospital road.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main changes between the maps: the shared car park becomes separate staff and public parking, a bus station replaces the individual stops, and two roundabouts are added. This gives the response a relevant overview and covers the key developments. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. In 2007, the bus stops were on both sides of Hospital Road, not simply “quite far away” on its right; in 2010, the public car park is east of Ring Road, rather than just described as separated parking. The roundabouts are at the Ring Road and City Road junctions, not at the “right side” of the hospital road. More precise descriptions of these locations and a clearer account of the access changes would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overall summary, and separate descriptions of the two years, followed by a comparison. This makes the main progression understandable. Some linking is effective, particularly “whereas” when moving to the 2010 map. However, the long final paragraph combines several changes in one sentence, and the sequence of details is sometimes difficult to follow. Phrases such as “so” and “and” are used to join ideas where clearer sentence boundaries would help. References such as “that ring” and “the right side” are also not always precise. Organise the body into shorter, focused paragraphs and use location-based transitions, such as “to the east of” and “at the southern junction,” to improve clarity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “transformation,” “allocated,” “development,” “bus station,” and “roundabout,” so the reader can understand the general changes. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “has been built” and “development.” Some word choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing a map: “covered with the ring road” does not clearly express the hospital’s position, while “move to there right” is difficult to interpret. Spelling errors such as “acess” and “seperately” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise location language and varied verbs, for example “encircled,” “located,” “replaced,” and “provided access.” Check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a comparison introduced by “whereas” and clauses explaining access. The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors make parts of the description unclear. For example, “The two maps illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “if someone want to come hospital” has problems with verb form and article use. The sentence beginning “whereas the upgraded map” is also overloaded, with several ideas joined without clear punctuation. Use a wider range of controlled sentence patterns, check agreement and articles, and divide long sentences so each one reports a manageable set of changes. Accurate punctuation would also help distinguish the map features.

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