Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

As the following diagram shows two maps leading acces to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.On 2007 there is a car parking for staff as well as for public in front of hospitalon both sides of with an easy access to city road while bus stop are also in the same location in front of city hospital. On the other diagram here we can see many changes and improvement in city hospital where the public car park is moved to upper right side of hospital and seperated from staff car park and bus station is made near left side of hospital as well as there are two roundabout which lead to bus station and city road made for easy access, where there is no change on ring road around city hospital as well as we can see a compass rose with the four cardinal direction North(N), South(S), West(W), East(E)

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two years and report several relevant changes, including the separation of the staff and public car parks, the new bus station, and the roundabouts. However, the account is only partial: it does not clearly explain that the bus stops were removed, and the claim that the public car park moved to the “upper right side” is imprecise; it was newly located east of the Ring Road. The overview is also unclear, and the statement that there was “no change on ring road” overlooks the new public car park’s access from it. The response is 143 words, below the required 150, so it does not meet the minimum. Add a concise overview and describe the main changes more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic time sequence, first describing 2007 and then 2010, and uses linking phrases such as “On the other diagram” and “as well as.” This gives the reader a general sense of comparison. However, nearly all the information is packed into one long, loosely connected passage, so the progression between features is difficult to follow. Repeated use of “as well as” and the extended final clause make relationships between the bus station, roundabouts, and roads unclear. Separate the response into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs. Use clearer links such as “By 2010” and “In addition,” and make sure each sentence presents one main comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing maps, including “car park,” “bus station,” “roundabout,” and “cardinal direction,” and the reader can understand the general topic. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as “maps leading acces,” “in front of hospital,” and “many changes and improvement.” Spelling errors including “acces” and “seperated” also reduce accuracy. Some location language is vague: “upper right side” would be clearer as a compass-based description such as “to the east of the Ring Road.” Build a more precise set of verbs and phrases for map changes, including “was replaced by,” “was relocated,” and “was added,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect several ideas in longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty, and the response contains frequent errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and tense. For example, “As the following diagram shows two maps” lacks a clear grammatical subject, while “On 2007 there is a car parking” has problems with the time preposition, article, and sentence construction. In “there are two roundabout,” the plural noun does not agree with the verb. Missing spaces and punctuation, as in “2010.On” and “hospitalon,” also make the text harder to read. Use past-tense forms consistently for both maps, and practise writing shorter, complete sentences before combining ideas with subordinate clauses.

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