Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two maps illustrates road access to a city hospital between 2007 to 2010.

Overall, it is evident that there were sevral stepts and the major chnage in parking.

To begin with, in 2007 there was a city hospital, ring road, and city road, which was remained same in 2010 respectively. In 2007, there was a bus stop and it will change into roundabout in 2010.

Turning towards the remaining details, in 2007 there was no bus station but in 2010, it will be build in west side under the city hospital. There was a card parking for staff and public right side of hospital road in 2007 and it will be seprated in 2010, which was public car park next to the city hospital on the east side and the staff car park under the city hospital on theside of south east.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad changes to parking and bus facilities, including the separation of staff and public parking and the addition of a bus station. However, the overview is unclear: “there were several steps” does not summarise the main transformation, and the response omits key details such as the two roundabouts and the removal of the individual bus stops. Some locations are also inaccurate or vague: the public car park was east of Ring Road, not simply “next to the city hospital,” and the bus station was west of Hospital Road. The response is 143 words, below the required 150. Develop a clear overview and report the main changes and positions more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. Phrases such as “To begin with” and “Turning towards the remaining details” help signal progression. However, the organisation is weakened by the very general overview and by grouping several changes into long sentences, making relationships between locations difficult to follow. For example, the final sentence combines the original shared car park with both new parking areas without clearly distinguishing their positions. Some linking is also mechanical, and “respectively” does not clarify the comparison. Use a clearer overview, then organise details by feature or by map year, with explicit references to the roads and directions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “ring road,” “bus station,” “roundabout,” and “car park,” so the reader can recognise the main subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “sevral stepts,” “chnage,” “card parking,” and “seprated.” “There were several steps” is also not an appropriate way to describe changes shown on maps. Aim for accurate map vocabulary and collocations, such as “redeveloped,” “was converted into,” “located to the west of,” and “designated as a staff car park.” Proofread spelling carefully, as repeated errors make the description less clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas using clauses such as “but in 2010,” and the response includes both simple and longer sentence forms. However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. For example, “The two maps illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “which was remained same” uses an incorrect verb construction. Future forms such as “it will change” and “it will be build” are unsuitable for describing completed changes between two past dates; use the past simple or passive, such as “was replaced” and “was built.” Articles, prepositions, and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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