Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two diagrams illustrate the layout changes in the road access to City hospital before and after its redesign .

Overall,the road has been reconfigured to improve functionality and facilitie the traffic movement around the hospital.There are a significant changes have been done , Although they were not too much.

In the original layout, staff of the hospital and public participated in one car park .There were 6 bus stops allocated around the hospital road .In this version the traffic movement was very crowded and difficult.

After redesign ,the car park are divided into two parks . The car park are divided into two car parks . The old car park became for staff only and they design a car park for public adjacent to the hospital. The bus stop is eliminated and a bus station attached to the two roundabout is added.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main change from a shared car park and separate bus stops to designated parking and a bus station, and you provide an overall statement about redesign. However, the account is only partial: it omits the two roundabouts’ positions at the Ring Road and City Road junctions, and incorrectly says the public car park is “adjacent to the hospital”; it is on the east side of Ring Road. The claim that traffic was “very crowded and difficult” is not shown by the maps. The response also falls seven words short of the 150-word minimum. To strengthen coverage, describe the road connections and locate the new facilities accurately, while avoiding unsupported conclusions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an overview is followed by a description of the original layout and then the redesigned one. This gives the reader a basic chronological comparison. However, progression within paragraphs is weakened by repetition: “The car park are divided into two parks” is immediately repeated as “The car park are divided into two car parks.” The overview also contains several ideas joined awkwardly, and transitions between features are limited. Organise the details by comparing parking, bus facilities and road access, and use clear links such as “whereas” or “by contrast.” This would make the relationships between the two maps easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “layout changes,” “car park,” “bus stops,” “bus station” and “roundabout,” so the main subject is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “facilitie the traffic movement,” “participated in one car park” and “attached to the two roundabout.” “Adjacent to the hospital” is also an imprecise description of the public car park’s location. Aim for precise map language and natural collocations, for example, say that facilities are “located beside” a road or that a bus station “connects to” roundabouts. Avoid repeating “car park” without adding new information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response uses simple statements and attempts a more complex overview, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors occur frequently. Examples include “There are a significant changes have been done,” which combines incompatible structures, and “the car park are divided,” where the subject and verb do not agree. Tense and article control also need attention: “After redesign” should be framed with an appropriate article, and the past map descriptions should consistently use past forms. Punctuation is sometimes faulty, as in “Overall,the” and the comma before “Although.” Build accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using clauses such as “while” and “whereas.”

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