Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given maps shows us road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
In city hospital it was fairly simple that in 2007, the city hospital ring road in north side and car parking for staff and public is east side. Morever, the city road is south west side and hospital Rd in the center of area. this places was arounded by city hospital.
A drastic change can be seen in city hospital over the period 2010. the ring road was same place. in additionally new public car parking provided seperately in east side. and bus station west east side. city road was still the same place. now, staff car park was south east. also,hospital Rd was still on her place.
after analysing the map the positive change can be seen in the city hospital in additionally, the open new seperate area parking. now, hospital are in good environment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You identify the two years and mention several relevant changes, including the new public car park and bus station, but the response reports the map only minimally and some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the 2007 ring road is described as being on the hospital’s “north side,” although it surrounds the hospital on its north, west and east sides; the 2010 bus station is placed on the “west east side,” which does not convey its location clearly. The overview is also replaced by an unsupported judgement that the hospital is now in a “good environment.” The response is 141 words, below the required 150, so it has limited space to describe the key changes. Include a clear overview and accurately compare the bus stops, car parks and road layout.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic paragraph structure: it introduces the maps, describes 2007, then discusses 2010 and ends with a concluding comment. This gives the reader some sense of the time sequence. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and several links are repetitive or awkward, such as “in additionally” and “after analysing the map.” The final paragraph repeats the idea of a new parking area rather than summarising the main changes. Some references are also unclear, particularly “this places was arounded by city hospital.” Organise the comparison around the main features, using clear links such as “By 2010” and “In contrast,” and ensure each sentence connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-related vocabulary, including “ring road,” “car park,” “bus station” and “Hospital Rd,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the description difficult to interpret. “Bus station west east side” is unclear, while “good environment” is vague and not an appropriate way to summarise changes to road access. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “Morever,” “seperately” and “seperate.” Aim for precise map language and accurate spelling; for example, describe a feature as being “to the west of Hospital Road” and use “designated” or “converted” when explaining the car-park changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Most sentences use simple structures, and the basic time contrast between 2007 and 2010 is partly conveyed. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the relationships between features. The opening, “The given maps shows us,” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the city hospital ring road in north side” lacks a clear sentence structure and necessary articles. In “this places was arounded by city hospital,” the demonstrative and verb do not agree, and the intended meaning is difficult to follow. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “in additionally new public car parking provided seperately in east side.” Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles and punctuation.
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