Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pictorial map illustrates the changes that occured in a road access city hospital from 2007 and 2010.

Overall, the road access to the hospital has been modernized with addition of bus station to replace bus top, an additional car park and two round about to make the hospital more acessisble.

The access road still maintains some old features like ring road . However, the single road which use to be the only road that lead to the hospital, has being modernized to include two roundabouts. One is located at the entrace of the hospital while the other is located at the cross road, overlooking the hospital.

Furthermore, the bus stop which use to be along the road that lead to the hospital is now replaced by a bus station on the left side of the road. The car park which use to be on the right side of the road is now for only staffs .However a public car park is now situated at the right side of the hospital.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main changes and give a clear overall summary: the bus stops were replaced by a bus station, the existing car park became staff-only, a public car park was added, and two roundabouts were introduced. These points match the maps and address the key comparison between 2007 and 2010. You also note that the Ring Road remained. To make the account more fully precise, describe the roundabouts by their junctions: one is where Hospital Road meets the Ring Road and the other where it meets City Road. The phrase “at the entrance of the hospital” is less exact, and “overlooking the hospital” does not clearly explain the southern junction. The locations of the bus station and new public car park could also be stated more explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable progression: an introduction, an overview, and then details about the road, bus facilities and car parks. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However” and “Furthermore” help signal these stages, and the reader can follow the broad comparison. To strengthen the organisation, group related changes more deliberately and use clearer references. For example, “the other” in the roundabout description requires the reader to infer which junction is meant, while “the road” is repeated without always specifying Hospital Road. The final paragraph combines bus and parking changes in a way that feels compressed. A more systematic sequence—road layout, bus facilities, then parking—would make the progression smoother and the cohesion less dependent on repeated “which used to” constructions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “Ring Road,” “bus station,” “car park,” “roundabouts” and “modernized,” so the main changes are generally understandable. However, the range and control are limited by repeated, informal phrasing such as “use to be” and “on the right side,” as well as inaccurate or misspelled forms including “bus top,” “acessisble,” “entrace” and “round about.” Some expressions are imprecise: “overlooking the hospital” does not describe a road junction, and “additional car park” could distinguish the new public facility from the existing staff car park. Aim for concise map language such as “was converted into,” “to the east of Hospital Road” and “at the junction with City Road.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including the overview sentence beginning “Overall” and the contrast introduced by “However.” The main relationships between changes remain understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction are frequent enough to limit accuracy. For example, “the single road which use to be” needs a past-tense form, while “has being modernized” has an incorrect auxiliary and participle. “The car park … is now for only staffs” also has problems with tense and plural agreement. Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly the missing space after the full stop before “However,” and some long sentences would be clearer if divided. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and use complete, controlled clauses when comparing the two maps.

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