Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illustrates the change in road access to a city hospital between the years 2007 and 2010.

Overall, the change is significant with additions of two roundabouts , car park and bus station

Going to the hospital in 2007, 6 bus stops are located on the sides of the hospital road, if you turn east from the hospital road a car park for both the staff and the public.

However in 2010, a bus station on the west side of the hospital road was established. With the addition of two roundabouts that made the access to the hospital or the bus station more convenient. Although the car park that used to be for the staff and the public in 2007 is now reserved only for the staff, Furthermore, in 2010 another car park on the east side of the city hospital was created. Its mainly used by the public only

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main changes and make relevant comparisons: the six bus stops in 2007 are replaced by a bus station, the original shared car park becomes staff-only, and a public car park is added. The overview also recognises the two roundabouts, showing a clear grasp of the maps’ central developments. This meets the task well, though some details are less fully reported: for example, the new public car park’s access from Ring Road and the bus station’s connections to both ends of Hospital Road are omitted. The statement that the roundabouts made access “more convenient” is a reasonable inference, but a more precise account of the changed road layout would strengthen the summary further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable progression from an introduction and overview to a comparison of 2007 and 2010, and the contrast signalled by “However” helps guide the reader. The main developments are grouped sensibly, so the account is coherent overall. However, paragraphing is limited, and some links are awkward or unclear: “Going to the hospital in 2007” does not clearly introduce a map description, while “Although” begins a sentence that does not complete the contrast grammatically. The final “Furthermore” adds another feature, but the relationship between the two car parks could be made clearer. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, and connect each change explicitly to its location and year.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “road access,” “bus stops,” “roundabouts,” “reserved,” and “east side.” These terms make the main changes understandable, and “established” and “created” provide some variation when describing additions. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for map reporting. “Going to the hospital” is conversational, and “if you turn east” addresses the reader rather than neutrally describing the layout. “The change is significant with additions of two roundabouts, car park and bus station” is also awkward and underspecified. Prefer precise phrases such as “the layout was modified,” “a bus station was constructed west of Hospital Road,” and “a public car park was added.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including a relative clause in “the car park that used to be for the staff and the public” and a contrast introduced by “Although.” The main meaning is generally recoverable, but some errors in agreement, sentence structure, articles, and punctuation remain. For example, “The maps illustrates” should be “The maps illustrate,” and “if you turn east … a car park” is a fragment because it lacks a main clause. The sentence beginning “Although” is also incomplete, and “Its mainly used” needs the possessive “It’s” (“It is”). Commas and full stops are inconsistently handled. Build complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement and punctuation.

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