Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The map below illustrates the layout of road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Ovarall, it can be seen that, in the span of 3 years the access roads to a citty hospital have been expanded considerably along with new construction of bus station and car parks.

To begin, the ringroad that sorrounded city hospital is added with a roundabout in the south of it. Furthermore, another roundabout is constructed down the hospital road to connect the hospital with the city road. In the southwest of the roundabout a new bus station is constructed directly in connection with both roundabouts, which was situated at either side of the hospital road in the past. In the north of the hospital road, previously car park for both staff and public is converted into staff car park only, which is connected directly to ring road making it accessible for staffs. whereas, car park for public is constructed seperately in the northeast of the staff car park with direct access to ringroad.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation over the period: the access layout was reorganised, bus stops were replaced by a bus station, and the shared car park became separate staff and public facilities. The overview captures these broad changes, and most locations are reported accurately, including the two roundabouts and the public car park’s access from Ring Road. This covers the task well, though some details are unclear or imprecise: the northern roundabout is at the Ring Road–Hospital Road junction, rather than being added to the ring road “in the south of it,” and the bus station is west of Hospital Road, not southwest of a roundabout. More precise descriptions of the junctions and the removal of the individual bus stops would make the account more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, a summary of the main changes, and a paragraph describing the new layout. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin” and “Furthermore” help the reader follow the account, and the comparison between the former shared car park and the new separate facilities is relevant. However, the body is presented as one long paragraph, and some linking is mechanical or does not clarify the spatial relationships. For example, “In the southwest of the roundabout” is difficult to interpret, while “whereas” begins a new sentence without appropriate capitalisation or a clear contrast structure. Grouping the road changes and the parking/bus changes into separate paragraphs, with clearer references to north, south, east and west, would improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of map vocabulary, including “roundabout,” “direct access,” “converted,” and “constructed,” and the reader can generally understand the changes being described. There are, however, several spelling errors, such as “Ovarall,” “sorrounded,” and “seperately,” alongside inaccurate or awkward collocations. “The ringroad … is added with a roundabout” is not a natural way to describe the change, and “in direct connection with” is less idiomatic than “connected directly to.” The repeated use of “constructed” also limits variety. More precise location phrases and natural collocations would make the description clearer and more flexible; proofread spelling carefully, especially in key map terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including complex clauses with “which” and “whereas,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, particularly in articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. For example, “a citty hospital” should use the correct spelling and article pattern, while “which was situated” does not agree clearly with the plural “bus stops.” The final “whereas” clause is separated by a full stop and starts with a lowercase letter, making the sentence structure faulty. There is also an unclear construction in “the ringroad … is added with a roundabout.” Aim for accurate past-tense descriptions of the 2010 changes and check that each relative clause clearly refers to the intended noun.

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