Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two maps given below illustrate how the infrastructure change to reach a city hospital in year 2007 and 2010.

Overall, the major changes in which include construction of new roundabout to link city major road to access hospital and also change the location of bus stop in 2010. In addition, in 2007 both car park of staff and public were together. However, in 2010 public car park was move to northeast and give access from ring road. Moreover, no new development in city hospital and ring road.

In detail, two new roundabout construct in which one roundabout to link city road with hospital road and other roundabout to link hospital road with hospital enterance and also link with ring road. In 2007, bus stop were along the hospital road but in 2010 the bust stop move to southwest and give access from newly constructed roundabout. In addition, in 2007 staff and public car park were together beside hospital road in southeast direction while in 2010, public car park was move to northeast direction and staff car park remain at same place. Moreover, ring road and city hospital locaton remain same in 2007 and 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main transformation clearly: the two roundabouts were added, the bus stops were replaced by a bus station, and the shared car park was divided into staff and public facilities. Your overview also notes that the hospital and ring road remained unchanged, and the detailed comparison supports these points. This gives the response a clear account of the maps’ key features. However, some details are imprecise: the bus stops did not simply “move to southwest”; they were replaced by a bus station west of Hospital Road, connected to both ends of the road. Likewise, describe the northern roundabout as joining Hospital Road to the Ring Road, rather than to the hospital entrance. More exact spatial reporting would strengthen an otherwise well-focused summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an overview is followed by a paragraph of details, and the information generally moves from road changes to transport and parking. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships, and the reader can follow the broad comparison. However, several transitions are repetitive, and some connections are awkward or unclear—for example, “the major changes in which include” and “In detail” do not introduce the information smoothly. The bus-station change is also compressed into a confusing sequence. To improve, group related changes more deliberately and use cohesive devices to show precise contrasts, rather than relying repeatedly on “In addition” and “Moreover.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “roundabout,” “car park,” “Ring Road,” and “Hospital Road,” and terms such as “construction” and “access” help convey the changes. However, the range and control are limited by repeated or inaccurate phrasing. “Bus stop” is used for the new bus station, while “hospital entrance” and “city major road” are imprecise descriptions of the connections shown. Several word forms and collocations are also awkward, including “infrastructure change,” “give access,” and “remain same.” These choices sometimes make the spatial information less precise, even though the overall meaning is usually recoverable. Aim for accurate map-specific nouns and natural phrases such as “was replaced by,” “provided access to,” and “remained unchanged.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to interpret. For example, “the major changes in which include construction” has a faulty clause structure, while “two new roundabout construct” lacks the correct plural and passive verb form. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and tense, as in “both car park … were together” and “public car park was move.” Sentence patterns are often built by joining several ideas with “and,” which limits clarity. Practise accurate passive forms for map changes (“were constructed,” “was relocated”) and check subject–verb agreement and articles. Shorter, well-controlled sentences would help you express the comparisons more reliably.

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