Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two maps illustrate the changes in road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.

In 2007 city hospital was surrounded by a Ring road, which ease its connectivity and Hospital road had parking on its east sides for the staff and public, which can be access from south east side on ring road. Hospital road was a link road between hospital and city because from noth side it was linked with Ring road and from the south side it was linked with city road.

In 2010 City Hospital road access upgraded, which result in addition of bus station, roundabouts and seprate car parking for staff and public. Bus station was built on the west side of Hospital road and east side was designated for staff car parking also two roundabout was created on north and south side just at the start of Hospital road. Public parking shifted to east side of hospital, which can be access through ring road.

Overall connectivity and road access was improved in 2010 as compare to 2007, although bus station was added in 2010, which was only possible due to roundabout and seprate public car park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation: the 2007 bus stops were replaced by a bus station, parking was separated into staff and public facilities, and roundabouts were added. The overview that access was improved gives the response a clear central message. Most locations are reported accurately, including the bus station west of Hospital Road and the staff parking to its east. However, some details are unclear or imprecise: the 2007 car park is described as accessible from the “south east side on ring road,” whereas it was accessed from Hospital Road; and the public car park was on the east side of Ring Road, not simply the east side of the hospital. The claim that the bus station was possible only because of the roundabouts and car park is also unsupported. More precise coverage of these features would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the maps, describes the earlier layout, explains the 2010 changes, and ends with an overview. This makes the comparison easy to follow. Linking phrases such as “In 2010” and “Overall” help signal the progression, and the contrast between the two years is generally clear. Some connections are less effective, however. The long 2007 sentence combines the car park’s location with the road links, making the relationships harder to follow, while the final sentence repeats the improvement point and adds a causal claim that is not clearly supported. Use shorter, more focused sentences and group related changes together to make cohesion more natural and precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “surrounded,” “connectivity,” “designated,” “bus station,” and “roundabout,” and the reader can generally understand the changes. There is some attempt to vary wording, but several choices are inaccurate or awkward for describing a map: “road access upgraded” is not a natural collocation, “parking shifted” suggests movement of a facility, and “which ease its connectivity” does not express the intended meaning clearly. Spelling errors such as “seprate” and “noth” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise location and change language, for example, “was converted into,” “was added to the west of,” and “was accessible via.” This would make the description more fluent and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, using relative clauses and time contrasts, but grammatical control is uneven. Errors include subject–verb agreement in “which ease its connectivity” and “two roundabout was created,” as well as tense and verb-form problems in “which result in addition.” Articles and prepositions are also inconsistent, as in “on its east sides” and “access from south east side on ring road.” Some long sentences join several ideas with “which,” making the structure difficult to control. The main meaning remains recoverable, but these errors recur across the response. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and agreement, and divide sentences when reporting several locations or changes.

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