Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This maps illustrate the changes road layout of city hospital from 2007 to 2020. Overall, There were many significant delvelop, The major development was road access from the city road. They have build another significant development that hepled people easily get into the hospital.

In 2007, A hospital located at northern part just beside at the city road. There were four sides of the city road in each sides. Except hospital intrance there were no other access to get other places. There were 6 bus stop at the hospital road. furthermore, parking area was just beside of the bus stop where everyone could park there. Ring road build around the city hospital.

In 2010, They built roudabout from city road to access freely of four sides of the road. They had rearrangement the bus station at northwest of the roundabout. Across the hospital road they built one another roundabout whether people can get inside or they just leave. The major difference seen in they separeted the parking area for staff or public. Publlic parking area located at the east side of ctiy hospital while staff car parking area remain in the same place where it located in 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad change over time and mention several relevant features, including the new roundabouts, bus station and separation of parking. However, the overview is unclear: “many significant delvelop” does not state the main changes accurately, and the claim that access was from City Road overlooks the hospital’s connection to Ring Road. Some details are misreported or vague. In 2007, the hospital was not “just beside at the city road”; it was north of City Road, with Ring Road around its north, west and east sides. In 2010, the public car park was east of Ring Road, not simply east of the hospital. A clearer overview and more precise descriptions of the locations and access routes would make the summary more complete and accurate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by separate paragraphs for 2007 and 2010. This gives the reader a basic chronological route through the maps. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and linking expressions are either awkward or do not clarify relationships. For example, “Across the hospital road” does not clearly identify where the second roundabout is, while “whether people can get inside or they just leave” makes the access point hard to interpret. The overview also repeats general claims rather than organising the main changes into a clear summary. Group related changes—road access, bus facilities and parking—and use precise references such as “north of” and “east of” to improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “roundabout,” “bus station,” “parking area” and “Ring Road,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. Phrases such as “significant delvelop,” “access freely of four sides” and “rearrangement the bus station” do not express the intended changes naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “roudabout,” “separeted” and “Publlic.” Aim for precise verbs for map changes, such as “was converted into,” “was relocated” or “was added,” and check spelling and common collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, such as “where everyone could park there,” but most sentences rely on basic patterns, and errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “This maps illustrate,” “A hospital located,” and “They had rearrangement,” which show problems with agreement, verb forms and sentence construction. Articles and prepositions are also often inaccurate, as in “at northern part” and “beside at the city road.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly after full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while” or “whereas.” Check each sentence for a subject, a correctly formed verb and appropriate articles.

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