Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the maps show two maps of road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

overall the city of hospital got a big space.In 2007, the car park stuff and public -all in place- had a very small space on the right of the hospital Rd and the bus stop was out side on the east wherever in 2010,the maps has changed where with some new feautures,you see at the entrence a roundabout

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the topic and make an attempt to compare 2007 with 2010, mentioning the car park, bus stops and a roundabout. However, the response covers only a small part of the maps, and the overview that the hospital “got a big space” is not supported by the visual information. Some details are unclear or inaccurate: the 2007 car park served both staff and the public, while in 2010 it became staff-only and a separate public car park was added beside Ring Road. You also omit the bus station and the two roundabouts. The response is 64 words, below the required 150; the 10 words copied from the prompt are excluded. To improve, report the main changes accurately and include a clear overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response by time, moving from “In 2007” to “in 2010,” and “overall” signals an overview. These markers give the reader a simple framework, but the ideas are not developed into clear, separate sections, and the final sentence runs several points together. The contrast introduced by “wherever” does not clearly connect the two years, while “you see” shifts into an informal, conversational style. As a result, the progression is difficult to follow. Use a short overview followed by one paragraph for each map, and connect changes explicitly—for example, explain that the bus stops were replaced by a bus station and that roundabouts were added at both ends of Hospital Road.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a few relevant terms, including “car park,” “bus stop,” “hospital Rd” and “roundabout,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is too limited to describe the map changes precisely, and several choices or spellings reduce clarity: “car park stuff” appears to mean the staff car park, “got a big space” is vague, and “feautures” and “entrence” are misspelled. “Out side” is also incorrectly written as one word in this context. Build a small set of accurate map-description phrases, such as “was located to the east of,” “was replaced by,” and “a separate public car park was added.” This would make comparisons clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few sentence forms, including an opening statement and a time-based comparison, but most of the response relies on simple structures, and control is inconsistent. For example, “the maps has changed” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the city of hospital” and “the bus stop was out side on the east wherever in 2010” show problems with articles, phrasing and sentence construction. The punctuation also makes the final sentence difficult to parse: it contains several ideas without clear boundaries. Practise writing complete, controlled sentences with a subject and verb for each map feature. For instance: “In 2007, one car park served staff and visitors. By 2010, it had become staff-only, and a separate public car park had been added.”

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