Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

These two maps illustrates road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Overall, the hospital's road network was significantly redeveloped during this period there are many changing occured in city hospital. Major change in 2010 bus stop has been changed and parking was also update in 2010.

Firstly, in 2007 city hospital was surrounded

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the topic and attempts an overview, noting that the road network was redeveloped and that bus stops and parking changed. However, it ends after “Firstly, in 2007 city hospital was surrounded” and gives no completed description of the maps or accurate details of the changes, such as the bus station, roundabouts, or separate staff and public car parks. As a result, the main features and comparisons are not reported, so the task is addressed only minimally. The response also contains 46 words, well below the required 150; 10 words copied from the prompt are excluded from this count. To improve, complete the description and select the key changes in both years, supported by clear location details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a paragraph beginning “Firstly”. This gives the reader a rudimentary sequence. However, the final paragraph stops mid-sentence, so there is no progression through the map details or concluding comparison. The overview also combines several ideas in a confusing run-on sentence (“during this period there are many changing occured…”), and the link between the two claims about bus stops and parking is not clearly expressed. Use complete paragraphs to group the 2007 layout, the 2010 changes, and an overview, with simple links such as “By 2010” and “In addition” to make the sequence clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a few relevant terms, including “road network”, “bus stop”, and “parking”, showing some awareness of the map topic. However, the vocabulary range is very limited, and several phrases are imprecise or incorrectly formed, such as “many changing occured”, “has been changed”, and “parking was also update”. These choices make the overview difficult to interpret and do not identify the specific developments shown. Build a small set of accurate map-description expressions, such as “was replaced by”, “was converted into”, “to the east of”, and “direct access from”. Also check word forms and spelling, for example “changes occurred” and “updated”, so the intended meaning is clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an opening statement and an overview, but control is uneven and the range remains narrow. In “These two maps illustrates”, the plural subject requires “illustrate”. The overview contains a run-on structure: “during this period there are many changing occured in city hospital”; it needs clearer sentence boundaries and a correctly formed verb phrase. “Major change in 2010 bus stop has been changed” also lacks a clear article and has an awkward tense construction. Finally, “Firstly, in 2007 city hospital was surrounded” is incomplete. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related information with conjunctions, while checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete clauses.

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