Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two maps illustrates us about the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. There are quite few changes which are identified . From the removal of bus stops in 2007 to introduction of several roundabouts and seperate parking facility in 2010.

In 2007 the access to city hospital was quite straight forward coming from the city road and taking the first right will take you straight to the city hospital with several bus stands located on both sides of the road . A combined car parking facility is also located on the right side of the Hospital Road for staff and public.

In contrast, 2010 the access to City Hospital isn't that easy . With the introduction of 2 roundabouts one coming straight from the city road and other one on the Hospital Road. The bus stops has been removed and instead of that a Bus Station is located on the left side of the road which is connected with both roundabouts. The major change that has been recorded is the seperation of parking facility for Public and Saff .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation: the bus stops disappear, a bus station is added, and parking is separated for staff and the public. You also compare the two years and include relevant details about the road and parking layout. This covers the task well overall, with some of the key changes clearly reported. However, the overview is not fully precise: “several roundabouts” should be two, and the 2010 public car park is on the east side of Ring Road, rather than simply part of the separation beside Hospital Road. The claim that access “isn't that easy” is an unsupported judgement; describe the new roundabouts and access routes instead. More exact positioning and a clearer summary of the overall changes would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph describing 2007, and a contrastive paragraph about 2010. This makes the comparison easy to follow, and phrases such as “In contrast” help signal the shift between maps. However, the opening overview is fragmented, beginning “From the removal of bus stops…” without a complete sentence, and some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “instead of that” does not connect the bus station change smoothly, while “one coming straight from the city road and other one on the Hospital Road” leaves the locations imprecise. Use complete overview sentences and organise the 2010 changes in a consistent order, such as road access, bus facilities, then parking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for describing map changes, including “removal,” “introduction,” “located,” “connected,” and “separation.” These choices communicate the main developments, and the response generally remains understandable. However, several expressions are informal or imprecise for an academic report: “isn't that easy,” “taking the first right,” and “major change that has been recorded” could be replaced with more neutral, map-focused language. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “seperate,” “Saff,” and “straight forward,” as well as repetition of “located” and “road.” Aim for accurate spelling and more precise terms such as “access route,” “adjacent to,” and “designated car park” to improve control and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, and the main meaning is usually clear. However, errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, and clause construction occur often enough to limit accuracy. The opening “The two maps illustrates us” has a plural subject with a singular verb and an unnecessary object; “The two maps illustrate…” would be more accurate. “The bus stops has been removed” also needs plural agreement, while “In contrast, 2010…” lacks a grammatical link such as “In contrast, in 2010…”. The sentence beginning “From the removal…” is a fragment, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. Practise complete sentences and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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