Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two maps illustrate the changes and some new features added near to city hospital from 2007 to 2010.

Overall, it is clear that some roundabouts were installed. However, the staff and public car park was separated.

To begin with, some changes had been done in city hospital like in 2010 few roundabouts were installed near the hospital road. Moreover, in 2007 there were few stops for buses, which were transformed into a bus station in western side in 2010, which was connected with both roundabouts. Additionally, in 2007 both public and staff car park were joined, however, in 2010 both were separated, and the public car park was shifted to the east of city hospital, and the staff car park remained at the right of hospital road.

Moving on, the ring road remained the same in northern side of city hospital in both the years. Furthermore, in 2010 the city road was connected with the hospital road with an roundabout, and the position of city hospitak also remained the same in both 2007 and 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main changes: roundabouts were added, the bus stops were replaced by a bus station, and the shared car park became separate staff and public facilities. Your overview also notes the separation of the car parks, giving the response a clear central comparison. Some details, however, are inaccurate or insufficiently precise. The public car park was not shifted to the east of the hospital; it was newly provided east of the Ring Road, while the existing car park became staff-only. The bus station is west of Hospital Road, and the Ring Road’s northern position is not the only relevant feature that remained unchanged. A more complete account of the new public car park and the access changes would make the key features clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing changes. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Moving on” help signal progression, and the reader can follow the broad comparison between the maps. However, the organisation is not always efficient: the first detail paragraph combines roundabouts, bus facilities, and car parks in one long sequence, while the final paragraph returns to features that could be integrated into a clearer comparison. Repeated “Moreover,” “Additionally,” and “Furthermore” make cohesion somewhat mechanical. Some references, such as “both were separated,” are also not fully clear. Grouping transport changes together and car-park changes together would strengthen the progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing map changes, including “installed,” “transformed,” “remained,” and “connected.” These choices communicate the main developments, and terms such as “western side” and “car park” are relevant to the task. Some wording is imprecise or awkward, however: “shifted to the east of city hospital” misrepresents the public car park’s location, while “some new features added near to” and “few stops for buses” are less natural formulations. There is also a spelling slip in “hospitak.” Aim for precise map language and natural collocations, such as “was added east of the Ring Road” and “bus stops were replaced by a bus station.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses linked with “which” and “however,” and most of the meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, particularly with articles, agreement, and sentence construction. For example, “with an roundabout” should be “with a roundabout,” and “some changes had been done” is an awkward passive construction; “some changes were made” is more accurate. In “the staff and public car park was separated,” the plural idea of two facilities is not expressed clearly, and “in 2010 few roundabouts were installed” needs an article or quantifier such as “a few.” Review article use and make sure long sentences do not combine several changes without clear grammatical links.

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