Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given two maps illustrates thw road access in 2007 and 2010 to a city hospital.

overall, it is crystal clear that there is a highly change in second year than in first year. There in no bus station so the bus are parked in the side of road so the traffic are high in the the side of hospital road.The map is changed in first map there is a straight path in hospital road and in city road and hospital road and in second maps thre is roundabout.

To commance with , city hospital in 2007 there is a high traffic in the side of the hospital road. the people parked there vehicles here and there . The car park: staff and public both are parked in the south eastern side of the hospital. The mid point of city road and hospital road is in straight path.there is a bus stop in the southernwest side of city hospital.

moreover , city hospital in 2010 was fully chaned than in 2007. There is a two round shape about in 2010. there is a public car park in the eastern side of the map , bus station in thr southernwest of the map and staff car park in the sothern east part of the map.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two years and mention several genuine changes, including the roundabouts, the bus station, and the separate staff and public car parks. However, the account only partially reports the map information: the 2010 bus station is west of Hospital Road, and the new public car park is east of Ring Road, but these locations are described imprecisely. The claim that buses were parked along the road and caused heavy traffic is not shown by the maps; the 2007 symbols indicate bus stops, not parked buses or traffic levels. The overview also focuses on a “highly change” without clearly summarising the main reorganisation. Describe the access changes accurately and distinguish visible features from assumptions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to separate descriptions of 2007 and 2010. This gives the reader some sense of the comparison, and “To commence with” and “Moreover” attempt to signal progression. However, the overview repeats details rather than clearly grouping the main changes, and the body paragraphs do not consistently organise features by location or by what changed. Several sentences are difficult to follow, such as “The map is changed in first map there is a straight path…” Repeated references to “the map” and unclear links between ideas weaken progression. Use a concise overview, then compare the road, bus facilities, and car parks in a deliberate order.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “roundabout,” “bus station,” “car park,” and “eastern side,” so the reader can recognise the main subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the description unclear. For example, “round shape about” is not a suitable term for a roundabout, and “the bus are parked” misrepresents bus stops. Spelling errors such as “thw,” “chaned,” and “sothern” are also noticeable. Aim for precise location and change vocabulary, and check spelling carefully. Replacing informal or vague phrases with standard map-description language would make the account clearer and more appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between features difficult to understand. For example, “The given two maps illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “there is a two round shape about” has problems with the article, number, and sentence structure. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent in “the bus are parked” and “the people parked there vehicles.” Several sentences run together or lack clear punctuation, particularly the overview sentence beginning “There in no bus station.” Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, especially plural subjects, articles, and past-tense descriptions, then add longer comparisons with clear punctuation.

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