Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THE MAP ILLUSTRATES THE ROAD ACCESS TO A CITY HOSPITAL BETWEEN 2007 AND 2010.

OVERALL,RING ROAD AND CITY ROAD REMAINED THE SAME MEANWHILE STAFF AND PUBLIC PARK WERE TRANSFORMED TO A NEW LOCATION WHEREAS BUS STOP WERE TURNED TO A BUS STATION IN THE LATER YEAR.IN ADDITION ROUNDABOUTS WERE CONSTRUCTED.

THE CITY HOSPITAL LIES IN THE NORTHERN PART OF THE LOCATION WAS ROUNDED BY RING ROAD WHICH WAS CONNECTED BY HOSPITAL ROAD TO MEET THE CITY ROAD REMAINED CONSTANT IN BOTH YEARS EXCEPT THE ROUNDABOUT.MOREOVER CAR PARK WAS IN SAME AREA FOR EVERYONE IN 2007 WAS LATER TRANSFORMED INTO DIFFERENT PARKING AREAS, FOR PUBLIC CAR PARK IT WAS CREATED IN THE RIGHT SIDE OF CITY HOSPITAL AFTER THE RING ROAD ,WHEREAS FOR STAFF CAR PARK IT WAS CONSTRUCTED IN THE SOUTHERN PART OF CITY HOSPITAL IN THE RIGHT OF HOSPITAL ROAD.SIMILARLY TWO ROUNDABOUTS WERE BUILT IN THE YEAR 2010.FIRSTLY IN FRONT OF THE POINT OF INTERSECTION CONNECTING RING ROAD AND HOSPITAL ROAD .SECONDLY IN THE POINT OF INTERSECTION JOINING CITY ROAD AND HOSPITAL ROAD.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main changes and provide an overview: the road layout largely remained, the shared car park was reorganised, bus stops were replaced by a bus station, and two roundabouts were added. Most details are grounded in the maps, including the roundabouts at both road junctions and the new public parking area east of Ring Road. However, some descriptions are unclear or inaccurate: the staff car park remained east of Hospital Road rather than being constructed in its southern part, and the public car park is described imprecisely as being to the right of the hospital. The bus-station change is mentioned in the overview but not explained in the detail paragraph. This covers the task well overall, but some features need more precise development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details, and the main changes can generally be followed. Linking expressions such as “whereas,” “moreover” and “similarly” show an effort to connect information. However, the long final paragraph combines several changes in one sentence, making relationships between locations and developments difficult to track. The sequence “firstly” and “secondly” is useful for the roundabouts, but the preceding car-park description is crowded and its references are not always clear. Separate the road changes, parking changes and bus facilities into more manageable sentences, and use location references consistently. Overall organisation is coherent, though cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing map changes, including “transformed,” “constructed,” “intersection” and “remained constant.” These choices help communicate the main developments, and the meaning is usually recoverable. Some word choices and collocations are imprecise, however: “bus stop were turned to a bus station” is not a natural description, and “the location was rounded by Ring Road” appears to mean that the hospital was surrounded by it. “Different parking areas” is also vague when the key distinction is between staff and public parking. Aim for precise map language and check singular/plural forms in vocabulary phrases. The range is adequate and includes some less common items, but inaccuracies prevent consistently precise expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer complex sentences, using contrast and relative clauses, for example “whereas…” and “which was connected…”. However, the longer structures are often difficult to control, and errors in agreement, articles, tense and sentence boundaries recur. Examples include “Bus stop were,” “the location was rounded,” and the run-on sequence beginning “The city hospital lies…”. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and full stops and several sentence fragments around “Firstly” and “Secondly.” These issues sometimes make the intended relationships hard to understand. Work on producing shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses only when their grammar and reference are clear.

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