Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two map shows road access to a city hospital in the year 2007 and 2010.In map of city hospital of 2007 shows that city hospitals is surrounded by a ring road.There is city road in South direction coming from East direction which further get divide into three road.The road moving towards north is hospital road which get connect to ring road.There are 6 bus stops on hospital road.There is a car parking in South-East corner of ring road for staff os hospital and also public.Entrance of parking is also on ring road.In map of 2010 of shows development in roads near city hospital.Hospital is surrounded by ring road, in east of hospital there is a different car parking for public, further there is car parking for staff of hospital in South-East corner.There is city road in south which is coming from East, there is roundabout on city road, roundabout divide into 4 roads.Road towards to North is hospital road, and road next to hospital road going in North-West direction there is bus station and another road goes to other roundabout which is on ring road it also connects hospital road.In 2007 there are no different car parking for staff and for public and there is no bus station which can cause traffic because of single road but in 2010 there are different parking for both public and staff and also there are two roundabout to maintain traffic and also have bus station

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main changes between the maps: the bus stops are replaced by a bus station, the shared car park becomes separate staff and public facilities, and roundabouts are added. You also describe the hospital’s position in relation to the roads. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: in 2007 the car-park entrance connects to Hospital Road, not Ring Road, and the 2010 public car park is on the east side of Ring Road rather than simply “in east of hospital.” The overview is also weakened by the unsupported claim that the changes were made “to maintain traffic” or that the earlier layout “can cause traffic.” A clearer summary of the principal changes, without speculation, would make the response more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly sensible order, describing the 2007 map before the 2010 map and then comparing them. This gives the reader a basic sense of progression. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, and the repeated openings “There is” and “In map” make the account feel list-like rather than clearly organised. Some connections between features are difficult to follow, especially the description of roads near the bus station and the roundabouts. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the two maps, and group related changes together. More precise linking phrases such as “By 2010,” “Meanwhile,” and “In contrast” would help show how each feature relates to the others.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “ring road,” “bus stops,” “car parking,” “roundabout,” and directional terms, so the reader can generally understand the features being described. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “road access,” “car parking,” “road next to hospital road,” and “divide into four roads.” Repetition of “there is” also restricts variety. Aim for accurate map-description collocations, for example “a car park,” “branches into,” “is located to the east of,” and “is connected to.” Take care with word forms and spelling, including “hospitals” when referring to the single hospital and “os” in place of “of.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the sequence of events is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries occur across the response. For example, “The two map shows” should be “The two maps show,” while “which get connect” needs a correctly formed passive such as “which connects to.” Several sentences run together without spaces after full stops, and the final sentence joins multiple ideas with repeated “and,” making its structure difficult to control. There are also inconsistent constructions such as “In map of city hospital of 2007 shows.” Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences and use full stops to separate descriptions; then add complex clauses only when their grammar is secure.

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