Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the given maps represent hospital road in 2007 and 2010. Overall, the hospital road had a problems on the way leading to city hospital. And then it improved to a better way to avoid all the traffic problems.

In 2007, city hospital has a huge problems such as public and staff car park and the bus stops. after turning right from city road to enter hospital road the first interesting thing is bus stops. There is 6 stops,3 on the left and another 3 on the right and behind them there is a multipe car park of staff and public people. It will be a traffic jam on the hospital road and for enter the hospital and for reaching the ring road.

In 2010, city hospital improved to better. They added roundsabout on the entrance of hospital road and at the end of road. They made a new bus station where it can reached by take the right side if you came form city road. Whereas, multipe car park seperated to be staff car park alone on the right side of hospital road and public car park you can reached it by taking the right side of the roundabout at the end of the road. However, return to bus station can be by turning the roundabout then find the entrance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two years and report several relevant changes, including the replacement of the bus stops by a bus station, the addition of roundabouts, and the separation of staff and public parking. However, the overview is not sufficiently accurate or clear: describing the 2007 layout as having “huge problems” and claiming the changes avoided “all the traffic problems” adds conclusions that the maps do not establish. Some locations are also misreported. The public car park is accessed directly from Ring Road, not by taking the right side of the southern roundabout, and the bus station is west of Hospital Road. Focus on describing visible changes and their positions, and give a concise overview of the main transformation without speculating about traffic outcomes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic chronological structure, with separate paragraphs for 2007 and 2010, and the reader can generally follow the comparison. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the 2007 paragraph moves from parking to bus stops and then to an unsupported traffic prediction, while the 2010 paragraph combines several changes with unclear directions. Connectors such as “Whereas,” “However,” and “And then” are sometimes used mechanically or do not express the relationship accurately. References such as “it” and “them” can also be unclear. Organise the details by location or by type of change, and use linking phrases only when they clarify a genuine contrast or sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bus stops,” “car park,” “roundabout,” and “entrance,” so the main subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “hospital road” for the road layout, “interesting thing” for a map feature, and “multipe car park.” Spelling errors including “seperated” and “form” also reduce precision. Phrases such as “improved to better” and “huge problems” are vague rather than suitable descriptions of map changes. Build a more precise set of terms for locations and changes, for example “located to the west of,” “was replaced by,” and “was divided into separate car parks.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences and comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “the hospital road had a problems,” “There is 6 stops,” and “They added roundsabout,” which show problems with articles, agreement, and plural forms. Tense use also shifts between past and present when describing the maps, as in “In 2007, city hospital has” and “There is.” Some complex constructions are faulty, particularly “where it can reached by take the right side.” Use the past tense consistently for both maps, check singular and plural agreement, and practise forming clear passive sentences such as “A bus station was added west of Hospital Road.”

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