Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two maps illustrates road access to hospital road for city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall,there had many particular changes in map a new roundabout is added to hospital road for easily accessed to bus station.And a public and car staff park added in map in 2010.
Firstly,In 2007 there is a bus stop in the east side of the city hospital which is replaced and moved to the west side of hospital road.Hospital road had six bus stop in 2007 and 2010 two new roundabout is added for easily access to bus station.
Therefore,in 2007 there is a public and staff car park at the east side of hospital road.In 2010 public car park is moved to the east side of city hospital which has access to the ring road.And staff car park is at south east side of hospital road and has a access to ring road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify several important changes, including the addition of roundabouts, the replacement of the bus stops by a bus station, and the separation of staff and public parking. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the bus station is west of Hospital Road, not simply a bus stop moved from the east to the west, and the staff car park remains east of Hospital Road rather than being described as southeast with access to Ring Road. The overview mentions changes but does not clearly summarise the main transformation of the access layout. To strengthen the response, compare the two maps more precisely and explain that the bus stops were removed and a bus station was built beside Hospital Road, with connections to both roundabouts.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview and two detail sections, and it generally moves from transport access to parking. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is weakened by unclear links and references, such as “map a new roundabout is added” and “which is replaced and moved,” where it is difficult to identify exactly what changed. “Firstly” and “Therefore” do not clearly signal the relationship between the points that follow, and the final paragraph combines several parking details without a clear comparison. Use one paragraph for road and bus changes and another for parking, and connect each 2010 feature explicitly to its 2007 counterpart.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant map vocabulary, including “roundabout,” “bus stop,” “car park,” and “Ring Road,” so the reader can recognise the main features being described. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “for easily accessed to bus station” and “a public and car staff park” do not express the changes clearly. Aim for accurate collocations and consistent labels for each feature, rather than repeating “added” or “at the east side.” More precise verbs such as “replaced,” “relocated,” and “designated” would help describe the map changes effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a few longer sentences, but most structures are simple and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “The two maps illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “there had many particular changes” uses an unsuitable verb form and construction. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent in phrases such as “two new roundabout” and “has a access.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention: several sentences begin with capitalised linking words after commas, and the overview runs together. Practise accurate present and past forms when comparing maps, and build clear sentences around a subject and verb—for example, “In 2010, two roundabouts were added to Hospital Road.”
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