Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps given highlights the before and after improvement of road leading to city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Firslty, in 2007 hospital road is narrow and it does not offer a big car park for the people working there as well as citizens. There is no place for bus station before 2010 however, In 2010 hospital road is reconstructed and two roundabouts are added in order to continue the flow of traffic.

There is a seperate parking area given to staff on eastren side of hospital road where as public car park is shifted to eastren side of hospital.

Bus station is also constructed to facilitate the public and it is located on the westren side of hospital road, it is accessible from both side of roundabout as well as city road.

In Conclusion, The hospital road is reconstructed with a more practical design to benfit both patients and hospital staff ensuring the ample amount of parking places while maintaning the overall traffic flow to city hospital.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main change clearly: the road layout was upgraded with two roundabouts, a bus station, and separate parking for staff and the public. The overview in your conclusion also captures the general shift towards a more organised access system. Most details match the maps, including the bus station’s position west of Hospital Road and the staff car park to its east. However, some points are imprecise: the public car park was not simply “shifted” to the east side of the hospital; it was newly provided on the east side of Ring Road, while the existing car park became staff-only. The claim that the bus station is accessible from “both side of roundabout” is also unclear. More precise comparisons of the 2007 and 2010 layouts would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable progression from the earlier layout to the changes in 2010, followed by a concluding summary. Paragraphing helps separate the initial comparison from the later additions, and linking expressions such as “however” and “In Conclusion” make the sequence easy to follow. This gives the report a coherent overall arrangement. At times, though, connections between details are mechanical or unclear: the sentence beginning “There is a seperate parking area” combines the staff and public parking changes without clearly distinguishing what was retained and what was added. The opening paragraph also groups several changes together rather than organising them by location or feature. Use clearer comparisons and refer consistently to the two map years to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing map changes, including “roundabouts,” “car park,” “bus station,” “eastern side,” and “reconstructed.” These terms make the main developments understandable. However, the range and precision are uneven, and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce the accuracy of the description: “Firslty,” “seperate,” “eastren,” “westren,” and “benfit.” Some phrases are also unnatural or vague, such as “a big car park for the people working there” and “a more practical design.” Choose concise map-reporting language and check spelling carefully. More precise verbs such as “converted,” “added,” and “relocated” would help distinguish the changes without relying on broad claims about benefits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “however” and a purpose clause in “in order to continue the flow of traffic.” The main meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “The maps given highlights” has subject–verb disagreement, while “road leading to city hospital” is missing articles and plural marking. The sentence beginning “There is a seperate parking area” also has an unclear structure, and “it is accessible from both side of roundabout” contains errors in number and article use. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly around “however” and “In Conclusion.” Review agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, while keeping the useful variety of structures you have attempted.

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