Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Language play important roles in the development of your country.Like social interaction , practicaly performance.Language is your back bone. you can express your feeling by says beautiful words, express you problems etc

In my opinion i do agry with that foreign language cause serious problems like it is not easily understand. people can not express their ideas in proper way. Because language exprss your words r idea r feeling very smoothly. people understand easily .you work status give relaxation.

However, language makes your life more comfortable r relax. your social interaction is strong . you can easily solve your problems , convey you message and express your feeling easily. its not problematic to you if you have a little bit idea of foreign language.

like english is an international language. people learn and speak this language for the improvement of their life style. its very useful in trade .people whose engage with trading its easily to communicate and explain their ideas and work .

its impact their socail activities and practical problems. because you do not enough knowledge of the country their culture their life style.so, language help you to understand their culture traditions and working style. your can easily solve your problems .you can easily search your work place and address and trade.in business its very useful to enhance your possition . you can easily chase your goals and reached your destination.

in my veiw foreign language help in everly field of life like communications , trading and problem solving and practicaly performance. so, beaware of social language.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a position that foreign-language use can create difficulties, then add that learning the language can help with communication, work, trade, and understanding local culture. These points are relevant, but the response does not consistently answer the question about the seriousness of both social and practical problems. The opening mentions social interaction and practical performance, yet the discussion mostly shifts to the benefits of language learning, and the final view that a foreign language helps “in every field” leaves your degree of agreement unclear. Ideas such as difficulty expressing feelings or finding a workplace are asserted rather than explained with a specific example. State your position clearly and develop separate, supported reasons about social and practical problems.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and “However” signals a change in direction. The ideas also touch on related themes, including communication, trade, and culture. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the response moves from problems to benefits, then to English and trade, and back to problems without a clear line of argument. Several sentences are fragments or loosely connected, such as “Like social interaction, practicaly performance” and “its impact their socail activities and practical problems.” Connect each paragraph to one main point, use clear topic sentences, and explain how each example supports your position. More precise referencing would also help readers understand what “it” and “your” refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “social interaction,” “express your ideas,” “international language,” “trade,” and “culture.” This shows an attempt to discuss both everyday communication and practical matters. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “easily,” “problems,” and “language.” Several word choices or forms make meaning unclear, for example “practicaly performance,” “you work status give relaxation,” and “chase your goals.” Spelling errors such as “agry,” “exprss,” and “socail” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of phrases for social isolation, access to services, employment, and cultural understanding, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences with reasons, including “Because language exprss your words…” and “people learn and speak this language for the improvement of their life style.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and punctuation make the argument hard to follow. For example, “Language play important roles” needs subject–verb agreement, while “people can not express their ideas in proper way” is missing an article. Some clauses are incomplete or joined unclearly, as in “Like social interaction, practicaly performance.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine ideas using accurate subordinate clauses. Consistent capitalisation and sentence punctuation would also improve readability.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.