Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people believe that living in a country where you have to speak a different language can cause a serioos social problem as well as practical problem i am tottaly agree with this point of view.Moving another country is some time very stressfull where language is different from your own language it can cause serious effects on communication skills and physiological effects on work place and even in social events.

Language is very important part of everybody life. Migration for study , work or other reasons can sometimes very stress full . It can effect coomunication skill badly. For example if some one is very good speaker but he cannot speak other language very well so he cannot talk confidently in classroom or even in his workplace and also he will hasitate to express his ideas and feelings in a meating or in group talk.

secondly if some one cannot express his personality traits very well in his class room and in his enviermonets it can cause physiologiacl problem with over thinking which can effect his growth.for example a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your position is clear: you state that you “totally agree,” and you give relevant reasons involving communication and the effects of isolation on confidence and wellbeing. The classroom and workplace example helps illustrate the first point. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the second reason is left unfinished (“for example a”), and neither point is developed with a complete explanation or example. The response contains 169 words, which is 81 words below the required minimum; 10 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from that count. This shortfall contributes to the limited development. To improve, complete the second example and explain practical problems as well as social and psychological effects.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an emerging structure: an opening paragraph states your view, followed by paragraphs introducing communication difficulties and psychological effects. Signposting such as “For example” and “secondly” helps readers recognise the relationship between points. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph stops mid-example, and the ideas are not brought to a conclusion. Some links are mechanical, while the relationship between sentences is occasionally unclear—for instance, the opening moves quickly from migration stress to communication and workplace effects. Use a clear topic sentence for each body paragraph, develop each point in a logical sequence, and add a concluding paragraph that restates your position. Completing transitions between ideas would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of relevant vocabulary, including “communication skills,” “confidently,” “express his ideas and feelings,” and “physiological effects.” These phrases show an attempt to discuss both practical and personal consequences. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, such as “serioos,” “stressfull,” “coomunication,” and “enviermonets.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, including “physiological effects on work place” and “personality traits” where you appear to mean the ability to express oneself. Build a bank of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully. More precise phrases such as “social isolation” and “language barrier” would help communicate your ideas efficiently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if someone is very good speaker but he cannot speak other language very well.” This shows an effort to explain cause and effect. However, the range remains limited, and frequent errors in sentence construction, articles, agreement, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “he will hasitate to express” has an incorrect verb form, while “Language is very important part of everybody life” is missing articles and possessive marking. The opening also runs several sentences together without appropriate capitalisation or punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea each, then combine them using controlled clauses. Proofread for articles, verb forms, agreement, and sentence boundaries.

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